So are all the people in the spirit world going to turn out to be Pokemon? Or is this the most complicated setup ever to a "Cresselia vs. Darkrai dream battle" fanfiction? The way you write this, it's almost like you're crossing it over with something, but I don't know with what. Something anime.

Just read all thirty six chapters. Dopest thing I've ever read. There's no way in hell that kids should be champions but the idea of yetkhi(?) helps my will suspension of disbelief. Always nice to get a reminder that non competitively viable Pokemon easily can kick as in the actual Pokemon world. Please finish this.

More like Bleach than Pokemon, isn't it?

what in the world? i don't even remember following this. gonna have to start from chapter 1. glad you're not dead, though, whoever you are.

I really like this. :)

It's different, and the first ten or so chapters I was unsure if I would continue reading too far into the story . I have to say, though, the further I got along the more hooked into the plot I was. Brilliant work.

A shame it hasn't been continued in almost a year though. If it ever is - I look forward to reading more of this! :)

I mean no malicious intentions with this review, but I must admit that I stopped reading at the beginning of this chapter.

No offense, it's just that this isn't quite what I was anticipating when i read the synopsis. While you have mentioned that people have asked when Pokemon will appear in the story, and I do agree in the point that the Pokemon have taken a back seat in this story, the real reason I stopped reading is that the story became stagnant.

Unlike other stories, this one lacked a plot, a reason for the story to be. While it certainly is an interesting concept, there is no force driving the story along, nothing to keep me wanting to find out what happens next. It feels almost as if it were the backstory for a character the protagonist in a more exciting story meets, or something along those lines.

While I do understand that this story may pick up in the future, I don't really have the determination to read through this while unmotivated.

Additionally, I think that this story is taking on the form of, for lack of a better descriptor, a generic fantasy story. As you tell us about the world of dreams, I can't help but notice it sounds more or less precisely like what a 'generic fantasy' would sound like. It also doesn't help all that much that the story could play out nearly exactly the same in a world without Pokemon with only minor variations.

These two reasons are why I stopped reading, and while I know it is too late to change the story, I hope that my input will improve your future writings. Again, I still mean no malice in this review, and I wish you the best of luck in your future fanfics.

Interesting story. I rather like it since it is so different then the normal pokemon story. I wasn't sure when I started reading it but I cam to like Ren and everything else. It could easily be an original story, but it needs the pokemon portion in a way since in pokemon there's the champion and the moythos is there to provide the back drop to the story.

I really enjoy the interesting characters and their interactions. They seem both interestign and beleivable.

ANd the plot is my favorite portion. It's unique and fleshed out. I already have some guess about the ending but it could go anyway I think really.

Only thing I think that could be improved is that flow of the story. The pacing seems a bit drawn out in the waking world sometimes. Some thigns could have been shorter, but that;s just my thoguhts on it.

Overall it's a very enjoyable story.

Well, I've got a newfound hatred for Damien. It takes a good writer to make someone both realistic and absolutely loathsome, and congrats, you've done both. In the span of a single chapter, I might add, because last chapter he was just annoying. This chapter got... Real. Well done drawing out the emotions during the battle as well. And as always, I look forward to another chapter.

Finessefully,

X

Small typo:'but at the same tim[e] almost admired you." He sounded disgusted with himself.
Well, I was half expecting Ren to attack Damien straight-up, really. It seems like a little bit of a let down to let him go so easily, but I'm guessing he's going to reappear again and have something to do with the dream world?
Interesting.

AHAHA. Trixie. Wow. XD She is a burst of personality indeed! And Damien too... Dang... They make Ren seem plain! Almost. :P

ARE YOU SERIOUS; BLEACH? Yeahh... that... kind of... barely occurred to me... maybe, in the back of my mind...? In my defense, I started Bleach after I started this story so... yeah. Anyways it's always awesome to find someone who likes some of the same things you do, so here's a high five. _

I kinda wanna find this 'ghost' already... :D Damien... getting in the way... Oh well, at least he'll help pass the time. _ Great job, can't wait for another chapter; and preferably the one after that, too. :)

Finessefully,

X

I've been gone a while, sorry 'bout that. School. -.-

Just one little mistake:

[To his surprise, however, Lunatone held its fire, charging directly towards Duskull's attack. Rather than countering, Lunatone took the attack head-on, losing about a sixth of its points in the process.] This line was written twice instead of once. Other than that, I didn't see anything wrong.

ANYways, content-wise, I found this very interesting. Yeah, contest scenes sound a little tough to write. o_O There just isn't a lot of active action, and you have to plan for finesse and stuff (not that -I-, of all people, have any problems with finesse XD). So, yes, interesting. I was really identifying with Ren when he was thinking about just wanting to watch the city go by and forget about everything. There are a lot of times when I have that exact same thought... I can relate!

Well, I'm off to read your other chapters~

Finessefully,

X

You would make me extremely happy if Ren lost on purpose, just to piss Damien off. Rules is rules, no?

I wasn't too surprised when you revealed that the ghost thing was tacked on, because it felt like that a bit. That said, the non-dream sequences have been amazing, and the dream sequences aren't that bad either.

Finally, congratulations on 150K words! You know, only 0.5% of pokemon fanfics on this site have made it this far?

It's back, and as good as ever!

The ending was indeed, very, very well done, and one of the most vivid insights into Ren's base character and motivations.

Again, it's a gross injustice that this has less than a hundred reviews.

You're back! I must admit that I don't like reading contest or battle scenes much either, so I read it a bit fast, but you have put a hell of a lot of effort into something you hate doing, which is something I don't think I could do for long. :#

So...this isn't the last we'll see of Catlin? Also:

"It really was," Ren agreed. "I might have to come and watch some more Contests in the future, but I really don't know about participating in them."

I laughed when I read that, becuase I could just imagine this in brackets '(and I'm sure as hell am not going to write any more)'. :D

Looking forwards to next chapter!

A little mistake-

'To his surprise, however, Lunatone held its fire, charging directly towards Duskull's attack. Rather than countering, Lunatone took the attack head-on, losing about a sixth of its points in the process.'

You used this sentence twice, back to back, but it's still fine I liked the chapter, especially for how you portray contests. It's easy to see how it could difficult for you to try and create a scene with a battling portion of the contest but to me it looked fluid.