love the chapter so far. Just a note. you missed an I in the sentence where you say Daphne and Astoria both look like their father. Besides that bloody good writing.

I had to write a little something after finishing this story so here I am. I love your work here, the pacing and story is such a genuine take on a teenage love story rather than the action packed macho lemons that 12 year olds constantly flood this site with. The change in perspective from the norm really changed my perceptions on the Harry Potter world so much. To offer a word of criticism however, I believe that your story was far better written with the idea of the love story than the Harry Vs Voldemort arc. The last, say, 4 or 5 chapters seemed if anything a bit rushed to me and the plot line against Voldemort and his downfall was blatantly ridiculous. That being said however, your goal while creating this story was not to amaze the audience with displays of powerful magic or duels but to open our hearts to the romance between these two characters. Overall I thoroughly enjoyed this story and hope you write more like it in the future.

Lovely story. I don't know if it's finished, but I can guess the rest. The way you wrote it is not like much other stories, but that only makes it all the more special.

It is extraordinarily brilliant how story weaves through annoyingly simple thing and stil con out as captivating and interesting... hats off to you admin

now i understood the whole implicationof soldier and nurse story

This is a great romance for the first 18-19 chapters. Even the end scene with Voldemort was pretty good. They lying about Daphne being alive and she lost her memories could have worked, except for the massive amount of D&D games dialogue that felt tacked on. Astoria and Nott was just plain weird. The last chapters were confusing and not very clear.

Still, the bulk of it was good.

bruh. good stuff. real good stuff. All the feels and everything. Brilliant

Yes, I can see how this one might have been the overall inspiration. As always, loved it.

Ah, finally going to pick up. Good so far.

Me encanta! Aunque me mato que perdiera la magia

Nott would have lost a body part by now! Or be a bit bashed in. Grrr. Pig!

Well, I can honestly say that my expectations were away. Phenomenal. The way the characters are written, with the realistic development and interactions, was quite amazing. The depth you gave to the houses and whatnot was far better than the original books, but admittedly that's not hard. You wrote an amazing romance story with Harry Potter on . that is a very impressive accomplishment. Well written.

The Ending is beyond overused, and ruins everything. Harry might as well wake up to realise everything was a dream, would be the same. Your Ending renders the story and their relationship meaningless.

Epilogue is excellent yet lacking... Nothing from when Daphne woke up to how she lost her magic and memory... Nothing from when she read her journal... Makes the story unfulfilled.

the story was good, but wtf was that ending? kinda ruined it for me