Awesome, im starting the main story right now!

Cough cough update RD high school cough cough

I love Matthews's personality. He's so funny xD and cute lol!

Thanks for the great story :)

And now is the conclusion to the first part. So, this chapter is a great ending. It's also nice to see Mark and Luna will be traveling together. :)

I look forward to Eliwood 'n Hector's story. Whether you update every Saturday or not, I'll be sticking around, nomey1!

Until your next update. ;D

Tear, tear the end. Sorta. It's been good. 'Cept the titli, it still doesn't make sense. Maybe in the main story. Have you said where Luna lived, and if you didn't where was it?

Good! Liked the modifications that you brought to the last chapter (having the person wear the item after they achieve a certain rank, instead of achieving the rank by wearing it).

As for this chapter, the dancing was great, especially the bits with Matthew and Luna. About the battle though, I thought that you stuck a little too much with the game. The ring passing off as a magical item was alright, but the stuff about the shops and all that... I'm not so fond of.

Anyway, still a pretty darn good chapter. Wondering how Luna will integrate into the group in the Eliwood/Hector arc.

Keep it up!

how cute! / Rath and Lyn dancing together awwww... i also think they do connect but i stll prefer LynxHector cuz idk they just seem like the perfect couple yano? a big brute and a care-free (somewhat tom-boy) seems like the perfect couple to me but again that's just me... i am sad that this is the last chapter idk it's just seems sad whenever it's the end well i can't for the next thing you do! :) and can't also wait for the next chapter of Radiant Dawn High School. X)

I don't think I can say much, aside from my buddy patattack.

I'm really iffy about the whole promotion. You could make future promotions more... "realistic". What I mean to say is for you to pretty much explain special new armor they're donning/new weapons they're wielding and whatnot. I do understand that the crests are magical items, but in writing it needs to be more though out. (Sorry if I'm sounding a little harsh here - at least you're receptive of your reviews.) ;)

Other than that (and a few spelling 'n grammar issues), good chapter. Keep up the good work - I'll see you next week!

Nice chapter. I liked how Serra reacted to Luna's outfit. For Lyn's critical hit, that she'd seem to multiply and completely disappear from sight was a little too much in my opinion. I think it'd work out best if she was just fast enough that someone watching would just lose track of her movements (and not be invisible). I'm not crazy about the knight crest bit, but I guess it can work if you pass it off as a magical item.

Apart from that, the bit about Eliwood and Ninian was interesting. Keep it up!

aww i just love how older brothers just worry about their younger siblings idk why i just do i find cute for some reason ha... and i would be TERRIFY of Wallace. 2 reasons why:

1. HE'S FRICKING HUGE!

2. i feel like i'm going to get killed by him becuz of his monstrous strength (and size *shudders*)

i'm a small person and A LOT of ppl are bigger than me so i make my OC like that too being small hehehehehe...

It's already Saturday, huh? Time's flyin' by, I guess. ;P

So.

This is a great chapter. I'm glad you're adding in some new dialogue between Luna and the other characters. It's a relief to see you're implementing all of mine (and others') suggestions and such into your work. ;)

There isn't anything I could point out what was wrong.

Your sentence structures and whatnot are good. However, I feel you could use some more commas/dashes/semicolons/etc. It might be a personal preference, but some of your sentences seem on the short side. Kinda makes it a tiny bit awkward - my mind is making like mental breaths before reading one sentence after another when I feel it is unnecessary. It might just be me, but whatever. ;

It doesn't take away my enjoyment of reading this, though. Good work. :D

Nice chapter. Liked the ending with the stuff around Luna's wound. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Death by stupidity. That is what could have happened. Loss of blood killing Luna. She is smrt. Wondering, will there be an in-between, prologue and main? Oh yea, and nice chapter. ;)

Sain can be serious and cool if he WASN'T a womanizer, what a sad fate... *shakes head* and such a cute scene where Mark is worry about his sister, well i find it a cute scene becuz they're siblings what else can beat that? awww / well can't wait till next saturday!

Hmm. An actual retelling whose main character isn't the tactician. Gasp. Just wondering how can you be silent for 25 hours in a day? Isn't there only 24 hours? But on the ACTUAL story, is Rath really chatty, or is it because Rath has been around Luna awhile? Well a good story so far.

hahahaha! this chapter cracked me up hahahaha! Sain just got PWNED! *rofl* if i was in this i would laughing like an idiot! HAHAHAHA! XDXDXDXD oh the humor, great chapter Nomey-chan, can't wait till next Saturday! XD