another fantastic chapter, really detailed and beautiful. can't wait for the next one!

For some reason I thought this was just a one-shot, but I was left pleasantly surprised when I saw the 'End of Chapter One'. I can't believe that your story has already lured me in, and you've only written one chapter haha! The Canada and France pairing has to be one of my favourites; I love the way you've portrayed the two of them, and not to mention everybody else, in this story. You've done a great job so far, and I eagerly look forward to reading more. Keep up the good work! (:

Oh, I love what you have so far! You really did a good job contrasting the relationships, portraying Alfred's uncertainty where he stands with Arthur, Matthew's affection for Francis that really does border on crush (despite what Francis wants to see), Kiku's discomfort at Yao's almost clinginess and the rejection of what he sees as the role of 'younger brother' (and all the implications the role carries).

The only point of confusion I really had was, well, when this story takes place? Because it doesn't appear to be AU, but we only see Matthew and Alfred as children back in colonial times - Alfred is already fairly well into his teens by the Revolutionary War. Yet you have them as young children watching horror movies... So yeah, that threw me off a bit. ._.;

What a way to start a first "official" fanfic! So well written and hooking! If you hadn't mencioned it, I would sweared that you were an English native speaker! (not that I am one, but anyway)

Vamos, a por el segundo capítulo!

That was one of the cutest saddest amazing story ever! Please write more? :3

It was an incredibly cute, wonderful first chapter! My only complaint is that it got a bit confusing. You skipped between places/situations so much. I love stories like that, but please add a line-break so I can tell when once story ends and another begins.

Ah~ I really love the cute Francis/Matthew in this story. I came here for the Yao/Kiku because I am not a huge fan of Arthur/Alfred or Francis/Matthew, but I really am glad I read the whole thing! I think You have made those two pairings earn a new fan !

This is your first time writing this? It is really really well done! The detail is exquisite!

I must say, even if you are a native Spaniard your English is phenomenal! That is coming from me, being from England, I am quite picky about grammar and how you treat the language. I couldn't tell that you didn't speak English! You even added some French and Japanese! (From my knowledge, you were correct in all of it.)

I hope you continue this! I really like it!

~ Evangeline Noel