Argh... what a place to end this... please update soon! I just wish the writers over at ABC caught a clue and let them get together!

I loved this story how Rick was cursing himself for being such a coward! I loved the story of Agent Fallon how he lost the love of his life in 9/11. I loved how Rick wanted to steel himself before trying to contact Kate! You have a superb writing style! Please update this story soon!

I have to say write on.

I am really enjoying this story. I also like the way you have humanised Agent Fallon. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

Kindest regards

Sadly, I did not enjoy this as much as the first chapter. I'm still interested to see how this turns out, but this chapter feels like you rushed it together just so you could post an update soon after publishing the first chapter. There are a lot of typos, and so you might want to reconsider at least proofreading. Also, I know we only had the character for two episodes, but his dialogue seems forced and a bit Deus Ex Machina - as opposed to me STILL hearing Castle in my head (so good job there _).

I think the basic idea you have for this chapter was nicely thought out, but the execution is...unpolished...

Sorry for the harsh critique, but I feel it helps better the writer. I still send much love! 3 3 3

i liked the backstory you gave him. it sounds really really believable. i'm excited to see what castle decides to do next and how he does it. :)

If you abandon this... I shall have to... yeah. xD LOVE IT

Good use of Fallon. Very well written in terms of content and emotion. A neat touch would have been Castle picking up his tab, but a minor quibble is that. I like the pace and flow here, feels natural.

My guess would be Agent Fallon and he would have words for Castle.

To man up and tell Beckett what he feels for her weath or not josh is there.

Who is it? Can't wait to find out!

You have me interested, please proceed!

I really enjoyed reading this. It was written very well and in-character. I especially liked "His heart had been screaming for his mouth to speak up but he just couldn't get the words out right in time." However, I hope you don't mind constructive criticism, but there were a few grammatical errors I picked up on. Otherwise, excellent work!

Great chapter I am contemplating writing something similar myself really I am guessing he sees Fallon at the bar!

First, I'm gonna guess that the person he sees is the guy from the Syrian consulate.

Second, I like this. It's definitely what I can picture him thinking about all of this. The two parter contained so many lost moments and chances that weren't taken because of the things going on around them. I like seeing what he thinks of all of it.

And third, here comes the constructive criticism, even in dialogue you need to put a period at the end of the sentence. Example:

"Hello, I honestly would have never expected to see you again today"

should be...

"Hello, I honestly would have never expected to see you again today."

Have you ever heard the phrase "show don't tell"? Well, it basically means that you should show the reader what's going on, don't tell them. Paint a picture with your words, don't just explain everything. You have a tendency to do more "telling" than "showing" in some places, and that's very common. Just work on doing more of the "showing". You can definitely pull it off.

So I think you have an interesting story going and I'll definitely be following it.

I'm thinking that if the person Castle sees in The Old Haunt is Beckett...this could be one hell of a story, so PLEASE UPDATE SOON!:)