The story is good. It is a nice beginning to the intrigue of Cairhein. This does need a grammatical walkthrough, however. Also there appears to be some duplicate phrasing. Both of which can be fixed with a good proofread.

awesome story xD i read book 1 first and its realy realy goood_!

Please update soon!

A good start.

Hm. I know you're not tied to cannon too directly, but just in case it wasn't intentional you should know that it isn't the three oaths that give aes sedai the power to sense darkspawn. Instead, it is because of the way darkspawn were made and their connection with both the one power and the true power that allow aes sedi to sense them.

a very minor error in your verbage: you confused the words "wrote" and "rode," rode meaning in context "traveled by horse (equitare)" and wrote meaning "inscribed with paper and pen (scribere)."

Your introduction to Da'es Damar might be a bit too much like the one that introduces Rand to the great game in cannon. There are, after all, a great many ways for people to contact each other; and the way in which a noble house contacts a noble visitor would be very different from the way they contact a the leader of a small band of mercenaries.

Still, you're doing very well at writing your story. Keep it up!

Hmmmm, tasty! Scheming and plotting in Cairhien has always been my favorite part of the Wheel of Time; if only the main character of the series was actually skilled in it, but hey, he was a farm boy. Tarmion Genda, now he seems like a real soldier of fortune. I wonder, is the 'foppish dunce' mentioned at the end that young Cairhienin noble they met in Ghealdan almost a year ago? What was his name, Tyro Lamin, or something?

Anyway, I hope you keep on with this story, it's amazing! And don't worry about your English, you write accurately, and even if you misspell a word here and there (like 'manoeuvres' instead 'maneuvers'), it's barely noticeable and your literary talent is obvious. The story just drags me with it. Keep it up, PLEEEEASE!

Amazing story thank you so much for continuing! It has been a while since I read your story, and even though I'm going to read it again now that you've continued I was wondering if you could write a summary of what happened in book 1 so i can jump right into book 2. It is completely up to you though and I would rather see another chapter in the series than a recap but both would be amazing... D

Thank You for continuing this great story. I hope to see more of it soon.

Dear god you don't know how happy I am to see part 2 after all this time! Happy writing and I love your WOT fics!

Very good! I like how Tarmion is jumping into 'The Game of Houses' so readily. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

i only happened to be checking your profile when i saw this sequal was up and from what i read the wait was worth it. keep up the good work

I checked on a whim, remembering your amazing fanfiction that started off this crafted journey.

And to my surprise and delight! A post!

Please more!