Is Feu based off Dimitri from the Sly Cooper series? Because the speech patterns are the same. Anyways great story! I honestly really wanted to see what Rachel did as a spy.

Hi! Sorry for the late review, but a hacker crashed my computer and I was moving to college.

But now that (almost) everything is fixed I can leave my review: AMAZING! The thing I adored more were the fighting scenes between Rachel and the Ninjas and Cree, and Bon-Bon vs the iguana (though I felt bad she died. Oh, but you know how it goes: sometimes in a well-made story you have to kill some great characters. S. Meyer should learn). How do you manage to write them? I'm envious.

Another things I liked were the characterization of Rachel and her badass attitude she gets during situations like this; and of course, Feu is one of the most original enjoyable OCs I have ever read of. Are we going to read anything more from him sometimes? Maybe with a certain Sector Leader involved?...

Well, that's it. Looking forward to your other fics. Keep writing!

-Ines

awsome ending

Ha HA! That was GREAT! Feu was a sweet-ass villain! And to think it all happened before FUGITIVE, apparently! Poor hamster. ): Another great story! Oh yeah, and I wanted to ask, are you ever getting back to MUSICAL? And I can also see that SCRAPBRAIN hit the SCRAP HEAP! WAAAAH HA HA HAA! ! But seriously, what happened to that, too?

Oh man. This story's epic and I'm so glad you finished it. To thank you, I've written this long review.

Feu is an interesting character because he's well rounded. He's got his own look, dialogue and his own set of goals and wants and all that stuff. He's not an empty shell. I like how he brings out the fact that Rachel is fallible.

Instead of just owning up to it, or justifying herself in any way, Rachel just sort of brushes the whole business under the carpet. It's not the most gracious thing to do, but it's the most believable action of them all.

This story is a wonderful example of dialogue. There are no wasted words (even in Feu's lines) and even though there's a lot of it, it still keeps the plot moving along.

What worried me for a bit was that Feu was such a strong character that he almost outshone Rachel for most of the story. The action takes the focus away from him and puts it back on Rachel. Oh, and the action itself was superb, by the way.

The last couple bits with Bon-Bon were very unexpected. Good unexpected. The first of the two reminded me of fights between mongooses and vipers. The last part was just...it was...I read it and said "oh hell-to-the-no." Until that point, it was a ha-ha kind of story. Stuff got real after that. The mood of the story changed and then Feu becomes misplaced. Actually, most of the humor after that becomes misplaced. If it's intentional, then I tip my hat to you, because it still works. The world might still be ha-ha, but Rachel's world isn't quite that way anymore. It's skewed now.

Aaaand I think that's it! Good job. Great story. I wonder what you'll come out with next.

I LOVED IT!

Feu, the more I hear you talk, the more you remind of White Monkey from Ape Escape. Still, who knew they had such a crazy past? Obviously, not Rachel.

this is so extremely awesome! i love your way of writing, and i like it that you also introduce that kind of sarcastic comebacks i just love. please update sooner! favorited.

There is such an overwhelming shortage of stories focusing on that slightly earlier era of KND history, where 274 was still in charge and our darling Rachel was not burdened by command but rather one of the best weapons the KND could bring to bear, stopping crises in their tracks and rapidly expanding KND Intelligence.

This story fills that roll in spades and then puts the juice in the blender until its smooth as Fiji water. We both know where the inspiration for Feu comes from, but I'm enamored at the fact that he knows Rachel. Perhaps from a time pre-dating her involvement with the KND? I assume that Cree would be a bit younger too...still a Teen Ninja, but not as grizzled as she is by the time the KND runs under Rachel's command. Some great characterization opportunities here...and I rarely know you to miss an opportunity (and when you do, I always have that horrible habit of pointing it out to you in private, anyway. You picking up on what I'm throwing down?

Looking forward to reading the new chapter ASAP! It shouldn't be too long, I'm using vibes again. Until then, keep it smooth! Peace out!

Oh wow, this William Fei guy is hilarious, a bit creepy though. xD

I love this so far.

You know the name - you know the numbuh ...

Seriously, great mix of KND and spy movie.

Wow! Really great action and fightning scenes! Rachel is so cool here; well, she wasn't the best spy in KND for nothing isn't it? And Professor Feu is hilarious, I wonder how was his relationship with Rachel... hmmm, given his personality, probably she doesn't EVEN knew she had broke his heart. Maybe she doesn't remember him, also.

Keep writing, I want to know!

-Ines

This story...it confuses me man. In a good way, because I want to figure out what's going on and what's happening and all that. Another thing that I liked was the moments that you would normally skim over-ignoring, but then you realize how dark it was (i.e the mom, the killing, all that,) and it's really a wonderful thing-to get that in there but blend it so well that you don't even notice. You just accept it.

I like. Oui, oui, monsieur. Continuez, veuillez?

I dig. :)"Maniacal laughter. It is cliches,no?" Love that! Please write more. I adore every thing you write. Ahh! I hate that I can't have as much talent as you.

Oh, Rachel. When will you stop breaking hearts? XD An awesome thing about KND was their parodies of pop culture, so I can actually imagine this as an episode, what with all the James Bondness. Feu /totally/ made my day.

I'm diggin' it.