AHAHAHAHAHA! XD That is SO CUTE! *U* Love that! Rock on! XD Did you upload the pic anywhere? I'd LOVE to see this! XD I LOVE Jin and Touya, and I REALLY love what you did here, the whole brotherly thing! XD Rock on!

What a cute story. Jin would consider a bag of marbles treasure. His method of playing marbles is different, but very Jin-like. I love the banter between Jin and Gama.

He's lost his marbles if you ask me." Gama said from across the room, fiddling with his brushes.

"Nuh-uh!" Jin protested. "They're all in th' bag!"

Very funny. Good work with this story.

"Ninja pile!"

That /really/ makes me want to hug Jin, for some reason.

Awwww! That's so cute, now I want to go out and capture a Jin! XD He's so funny, and I love his big blue eyes. I wish more people portrayed him like you do. XD

Great for a laugh, I can totally see it. :) Most definitly going into my favorites.

I like it! I think you made Jin a bit too childish-he's playful, but he's still a hardened shinobi-and I think that Touya would probably have just frozen them in place, but I'm just happy another Jin/Touya (as in and/or, not slash :P) fanfic has been posted.

There were a few spelling/grammatical mistakes-for instance, you should say "off terrorizing someone" and leave out the rest of the end of that sentence.

Tee hee Jin was my fav back when i watched the show with my cousins they always gave me he bad or not so good characters i never got to pick until now.