If I was Jenna I would say no because Steele is bullying balto

On the negative side (to get it over with), since you asked for honesty, some of the dialogue didn't quite sound like it was the movie characters talking. Each character has a particular way of speaking, and you didn't always nail it here. That and some spelling errors (toward the end you spelled "he" with two "e"s) kind of drag this story down. Also, there are a few unanswered questions in the plot, like how Sasha knew who Steele was and how she so quickly insinuated herself with the crowd in Nome. You kind of touched on the last one by covering how she found acceptance, but how did she break the ice, and how did she know the dogs in town would accept her so readily?

On the more positive side, your paragraph structure's a lot better than some writers I've seen (although it still needs a bit of work; try using the enter key exactly when the speaker changes; having two characters talk in a single paragraph gets confusing). The scam Sasha and Steele pulled also reminded me of the stunt Potiphar's wife pulled on Joseph. I don't know if that was intentional, but anything that reminds me of a Bible story is a plus in my book. Personally, I've considered the idea of a series of short Balto fanfics (kind of like what I think the episodes would be if a TV series had followed the first movie), and I could see ths basic plot fitting in there. Not that I plan to steal your idea; just a thought.

I'll give you another tip that can really bring life to just about any story: don't just focus on sights and sounds; bring in other senses too, and be detailed about it. My personal theory of the matter is to focus on the ones that would be important to the characters (e.g. smells in a dog's case, like you did with the blanket), but other opportunities come up too; the feathery touch of a dog's tail, the pounding of a runner's heart, and so on. The basic idea is to make your readers feel like they're there in the room (or the forest, cave, etc.) with the characters. Try it and see what happens. :)

On the Victory Side,
Dragon Tamer

Needed a fair amount of grammar check and so on...but it turned out to be really good. Good job.

Very impressive and well done story! 9/10!

It's sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooo gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd ddddddddddddddddddddddddd!

I loved this story. to STEEL and SASHA I say KARMA'S A B*TCH SUCKERS HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

Very sweet, Steele, mean as ever. But Sasha was just cruel to Jenna and Balto, Jenna should have believed him from the beginning if she really loved him.

Whoa! That was pretty nice! You deserve a BIG FAT... COOKIE! *Hands cookie to you* You deserved it! :•)

-Iamverylavyokay