AWESOME you should carry on. it was wounderfull :D

P.S i also have a malcolm story up :D

Awesome chapter!

awesome story! pleaseplesae please continue! I'LL LOVE YOU FORVER! please? I LOVE IT

Yay for minor characters! :D Your narration style is interesting, and do I detect a hint of… hmm, what would you even call that? Malchel? Ralcolm? Whatever it is, it's cool.

I am a little annoyed that you've gotten seven reviews for your first chapter and my most per chapter is four! Siiiiigh. Biased people.

Flame: I HAT THIS STORY! ITS AWFUL AND I CANT FIND ANYTHING RONG WITH IT SO I HAT IT! ((Hm... I'm not very good at flames.)) HOW DARE YOU NOT RITE PERCABETH!

Love: I LOVE THIS STORY! ITS AMAZING AND I CANT FIND ANYTHING RONG WITH IT SO I LUV IT! ((Hm... I'm sensing a pattern here.)) I LOVE HOW YOU AREN'T WRITING PERCABETH. We have too many of those. You're absolutely amazing!

CC: Breaking the pattern... Some of your lines are really great. I love the part about the Taylor Swift lyrics, and the whole relationship between Rachel and Malcolm, it's refreshing. The whole story is told through dialogue, which isn't necessary a bad thing, but there's not a lot description. How you portray Gerald and running away from the empousa is awesome and original.

Keep writing!

Jeez, finally Malcolm gets some attention! Can't wait for an update!

What a cliffy! Will definitely look forward to more of this store. Great start.

YAY! Something FINALLY about Malcolm! He's one of my fave minor characters in the series...anyways update soon!

Finally a Malcolm story I have been looking for a malcolm story forever loved it continue porfavor

This is pretty good. I like it.

Rachel...get away from Malcolm...he's mine...xD

Great beginning! Please update- can't wait to read more! For your first story, this is awesome!

Yay. -bounces-