Oh that's fucking priceless! What did he put in the eggnog cause now I want some!

Nothing wrong in not being able to keep Kim and Shego out of bed. :P

Story had me laughing a lot by the end. Great storyteller, you are. :D

LOL! drew what the hell did you put in the eggnog? Great story

T-rating, really?

Just kidding, nice story.

Great work on Kim's moopy attitude until Shego arrived. Apparently, again everyone knew ;)

keep up the good writing,

reader101w

Aaauugghh! Drakken and Barkin! My eyes! My eyes!

Not too bad here. I would have liked a bit more detail with how Ron and Yori got together, but oh well.

A few lines at the end were border-line "T/M" rating, but I'll forgive...

Thanks again so much for the entry and participating in my contest...

great story. i think drakken is my favorite character in this one because of that last line. because whatever he put in there made for some delightful reading

Not bad. Not great, but not bad. Some of Kim's internal monologue was really fun to read, but the problem is that generally people don't think that linearly–especially when they've been drinking. If Kim is stewing in her own unhappiness while sloshed, I'd expect her to have a sort of rambly, weird thought process that doesn't really come through.

The other issue I have is how sudden everything is, and how Shego seems not to respond with anything except awkwardness to Kim's very bizarre welcome. Sure, she might want to get into Kim's pants just as much as the viewpoint character wants into hers, but that doesn't necessarily mean that she loses all verbal fluency until they're alone in a room together. It also doesn't mean that nobody else comments on Kim's blatantly strange behavior towards someone whom she was essentially just acquaintances with, in the first place. Moreover, the story reads like an abstract of a story in places: "they talked for hours, etc." doesn't necessarily tell me anything useful.

And lastly: the mass orgy at the end was kind of dumb.

Stuff I liked: I think you got Kim's characterization down in a very believable way. Yeah, she had some reactions that didn't ring true to me, but her feelings of alienation and ambivalence over her "career" struck me as very astutely done. Keep working at dialogue and pacing, and your writing will improve significantly. It might also be useful for you to look into a beta reader who is willing to do both grammar and spelling (not really a problem for you, evidently) and characterization, pacing and dialogue.

The Eggnog is worse than alcohol! LOL, Great story, it was a great Kigoish story... twisted ending though, LOL.

Invader Johnny Signing Off.

Nice job, that was fun.

Can't...stop...laughing...HELP!

A very delightful tale for the season...and another nice look at a possible Kim / Shego get together angle. It was nice to see how you got them to a point where all the puzzle pieces fall together and everything finally make sense. Well played!

Thanks for the story and I hope that your holidays are happy ones!;)

Very Nice Shado, Merry Christmas to ya.

Awww. That was a funny twist at the end, I dont think anyone expected the ending though. Looking forward to the continuation of ATCS and perhaps you could do a oneshot of Christmas day in the possible household?

omg you have to do a story about what happen with the others i have to know