I like it, though I'm not that familiar with the Ed/Jasper fanfics.

.

Wow.. I had family that is balemia.. and my sister used to be anerixia. But came though. That is so sad.. My heart goes out to them both.. the care and love is fantastic. You can feel it.

3 Leona :)

Wow this was just amazing and your poem ... Hautingly exquisite. I know writers really hate this but I very rarely review but this ... this called for some recognition. You are truly brilliant.

Exellent, never stop writing honey. Although, I wish you'd made this into a chapter story. Edward kinda just went from thinking being skinny is good to reaising hat he'd done in a matter of minutes. If you'd made it a chapter story, we could've seen his transformation, if you wanna call it that, in more detail. Still a good stroy though, much better than those othervstories I've read about annorexia

My Dearest Alice,

Another work of literary genius. You never fail to strike my imagination with wonderfully loving and tragic images. I have loved your writing style from the first time I read your work and still love it to this day! Don't you ever dare to stop writing for that will be an extremely sad day. I adored it hunny!

With Love,

Marlene

great use of imagery. interesting using male as anorexic typically a female disorder strikes 10% of male with nearly a zero% recovery in male sufferers. aligning a broken mirror to his feelings of worthlessness is pure genius. excellent work.

Love, Mom

this was pretty good, you made it so easy to see in my head, though the image was horrible. I like how you used skeleton to discribe how Edward looked.

You've got a few gramma mistakes, and you need to add more commas or fullstops to break up your sentences like with "He had finally seen the damage the reason I hide myself in baggy shirt after baggy shirt I didn't exist." It would be eaiser to read if added commas like

"He had finally seen the damage, the reason I hide myself in baggy shirt after baggy shirt, I didn't exist." it doesn't make it just one sentence.

Another thing that you could maybe improve on is the way Edward thinks, He kind of goes from thinking that "Thin is IN" to thinking that being healthy is a good thing in a matter of minuets. If you have changed the story into a chapter story you could have expressed it better, still the way he changed his mind was better then some stories I've read, where the sufferer does a complete 180 with no reason at all, in this you can still see that Edward's a little unconvinced.

I hope you write again soon, because you've got an interesting style of writing, different from what others around here write, plus you have an origional story line when it comes to anorexia, it always seems to be Bella for some reason.

:'D So happy! *EPIC GLOMP* I'm here. I will try to always be.