I liked the story, although not the ending. Two mistakes I noticed was when you changed the lab in Biology class to all of a sudden being a movie and lecture, as well as Rosalie's face turning beet red in embarrassment. Vampires definitely don't blush. You have a lot of potential as a writer, just felt like you rushed through everything there at the end. It didn't feel like you really explored the characters' and I was really thrown off by Renee 'Snow' and 'Beth' at the end. Didn't really fit at all to be honest, and there was no real conclusion or happy ending either...

This was amazing!
I left the fandom years ago, but came over from another fic of yours
I haven't seen this before, what you have done with Bella's character
The whole back story about her family
The Winters couple
The fic left me feeling oddly satisfied and happy,
Thanks for writing _

Wolfe, i read the HP story, even the 4 chapter wrapup. Bith were unique, filled with deep perspective of personal nature from character pov. This story was the most novel if the 60,000 plus fanfics I gave read in last10 years. Please write professionally, your voice is needed.

This is such a cool story and a really cool premise. You did a good job of dropping hints to Bella's past, to let the reader have a chance to figure out before it all came out, but I still wasn't expecting everything. Like her getting grabbed by Jane and taken to Marcus. And it didn't click until you said that Marcus had been the vampire to kill her in like every life.

Also Banafrit's story is interesting. It feels familiar to me (i like mythology and legend), but i can't place it. Gonna be googling. Super impressive if you thought it up, but even if it's just adapted you did a good job making it feel real.

I like that Bella and Edward are on more equal footing here. At least in life experiences.

Thank you for writing and sharing!

Holy crap she was set to marry her older brother?! And he younger brother Marcus l. A volturi king was the one who wanted to marry her but ended up killing her every time cz of her scent? Holy shit
This is crazy and wow I have no words.

Such an unusual twist to the Bella/Edward tale. Liked this well written story. Thank you.

Very interesting so far, but this ending doesn’t feel complete. It feels like the setup for a sequel, even though no sequel exists.

Really well done. I loved the concept, and the romance as well.

This story is absolutely thrilling and chilling in all the right ways. The romance is poignant and the dark pasts are haunting and intriguing. Beautifully done.

Great Read!

why dont you just post the book, its not like there is much difference at this point.

This remains the best Twilight fan fiction and one of the most original fanfictions i have ever read. Idk if you still get reviews, but thank you so much for this gem!

OMG! Its amazing!

This was a wonderful story.

Good story all around, interesting back story, certainly unique. Very nice, fleshed out oc characters. But the romance was a little strange. I mean she was deathly afraid of vampires, then curious, then madly in love. It just seems it came out of nowhere, there was no time or realisation of what she is feeling in between, it seemed a little weird to me. And it ends quite abruptly, leaving most of the key points of the story unresolved. All in all, very intriguing premise and good writing, but to my opinion you handled it poorly.