wow. What a ride! This speaks so much. The images, the descriptions, the details...

This line? "Desire achieved critical mass as clothing exploded around the couple like so much shrapnel." Just...wow. Brilliant description and SO sexy and sensual at the same time. And the vegetable drawer...and the bending over...and the GRAPE...she is a master of seduction. Had me as easily as she had him. And the dance of the cooking giving way to the dance of eroticism with BOTH as old as time...and this is awesome. Wow. EXCELLENTLY done.

Oh my. This was lovely.

Beautiful use of language and descriptions as always.

Wow. I have to go lie down now.

This is an absolutely stupendous story! The show itself is all about relationships, and I doubt it will ever have anything remotely like what you've written. On the other hand, as you said in your profile, we all have the desire to know more about them or to create our own perspective of those characters that people our imaginations. You have done a magnificent job creating and sharing your perspective. Well done! I liked it in case you couldn't tell.

Thanks for posting it here for us to read.

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Wow! The teaser on LJ was nothing compared to this. We're in the middle of a heat wave here...even though I saw the rating, I couldn't have imagined I'd get THIS overheated from a one-chapter piece.

Your prose is really lovely, full of sensuality and vivid imagery. Even the racy bits, such as:

*Desire achieved critical mass as clothing exploded around the couple like so much shrapnel.*

I need a cold drink now...:)

Wow, this was HOT! And I liked the reference to action potentials in para 2, plus all the descriptions. Please do write another NCIS fic over the summer and why not try your hand at a Castle fic! Thanks for enabling me to unwind after a rather tense morning.

Gret fan fiction!Loved your Tiva!

::sighing happily:: Damn, why can't I ever find grapes THIS good? LOL great job!

I’ve been reading Fan Fiction on this site for over a year… this is the most elegantly written peace I’ve ever read!

Thank you!

RCL

Ry - YAY! GO me i finally read it! i don't know why it took so d mn long but i finally read it. will have to read the others. :) Great job woman... it was erotic that's for sure. :)

"She moved across the kitchen like a trained dancer." One of many lovely images. I don't know what I found more sexy, the sheer poetry of Ziva's meal prep with Tony totally besotted , or the actual acting out on their lust. Either way, this was very satisfying. I could almost smell the aroma of Ziva's meal. Of course you know I will never think of green grapes quite the same way now !

wow... how can this be youronly ncis story?

To repeat my verbal review... AWESOME!

I must say, I have been reading from numerous writers with an even more vast set of styles, yet I havent come across someone that can make a mastermind fic out of shameless smut and flagrant fluff in quite some time. Your story, although lacking in a plot, was brought alive by your writing and your descriptions. [When I said 'lack of plot', it wasn't meant derogatorily, only that there wasn't much actual story.] Okay, well, I've babbled enough. Thank you. :) *CaNDi*