Ahh I love it 3 :D This is just a one shot, right? Bummer :(

This is a nice start! The rapid changes in tense at the beginning are a little awkward, and some of your sentences could be less wordy, but good storyline. I'm interested to see what happens in Kenshin's early wandering years. I really like that last sentence, the "gentle violet" versus "violent amber."

Poor Ken-Ken. The part where he doesn't allow himself to look on the beauty of the rising sun is so very sad.

I really liked this. You paint a very clear picture of Kenshin and how he is feeling.