Wow incredible

wow cool

awesome part 2?

This is so cute!

I love this story so much!

Tarble is one of my second favourite charactors! He's so cute.

Cant wait for more!

Awh, please please please continueeee! I ABSOLUTELY ADOOOORE TARBLE! And i'm liking this story as well(: Thanks for the story, and again, please update. I really wona know how this will turn out. But, if you make tarble gay or something like that... *EYES ON FIRE WITH ANGER* But, it seems that vegeta's character in your story will keep him in check. Lol

Please update this! :D I can imagine after Tarble and Goku left the room Vegeta snuck to the fridge and stuffed his face with the cupcake. xD So cute! And I really went "aww" when the boys asked Tarble to watch the movie with them. This is the first fanfic I've read with Tarble, and I must say I really like it! Please continue... *puppy eyes like Goten* *.*

This fanfiction has potential, I think, but it could be much better. First, I think it would be best if you stuck to writing in the past tense whenever you are writing in the third person. It just flows better that way.

Second, there are some basic grammar mistakes that you're making. it kind of seems like you understand comma placement to a certain extent, but you're missing it in certain spots. Also, I can spot a few run-on sentences as well. A comma is not a period. I don't really have the time to go through and point out every grammar mistake. So, you should probably spend some time doing some research. I would like to point out that the title should be: Tarble's Hidden Talent

You should capitalize every first letter of a word in the title except for words like the, a, of, at, for, etc. The chapters should be capitalized, too.

Third, your chapters are much too short. You have four chapters and only 2000 something words. That's about 500 or so words per chapter. You should make each chapter at least 1000 words long. It's just a general rule of thumb. It gives your reader more time to get immersed in a chapter without having to click a next button.

The next thing I'd like to comment on relates to the story itself. You need to cover all your bases, if you will. Why did Tarble decide to stay on Earth instead of going with his wife, Gure? You clearly state that he wanted to go with his wife, but he didn't. Why? You never said why he wanted to stay on Earth in the first place. So, that's kind of confusing.

Anyway, like I said, I think this story has potential. Fix up some of those mistakes, and keep writing. The best way to get better at writing is to practice, practice, practice! :)

This story is really good. LOL! Who knew that vegeta had liked chocolate cupcakes! XD well, keep typing on this story please.

This is me saying, peace!

"Don't do a woman's job." Oh c'mon Vegeta! That's so sexist! Besides, you want to eat that cupcakes... Don't be a killer of dreams (yeah right, as if Tarble dreamed of cooking) xD

This is so funny x)

First question: How Goku knows that Vegeta love that cupcakes?

Second question: Update soon? ºwº

• Zer0 •

I read your fic and I must say that I really really liked it.

Vegeta is so ... Vegeta! XD And I'm dying to know his reaction to discovering the Tarble's true talent. Or rather, that his little brother is a better cook than warrior. I wonder, will this really the situation?

I'll be waiting for the update! Greetings

• Zer0 •

Update! Plzzz :P

i like it a lot :) write more soon

Omg tarble the cutie! u better add some slash or yaoi!