Reviews for Mystery of the Spirit Gems
Guest chapter 1 . 5/18
There's one big problem here: If Andy was born 9 months after Danny and Sam "slept each other" alone, then where was the plot because I don't see it here in the middle of the story. That's one error that if you wished to go back and edit it. But overall, good story, though.
Guest chapter 32 . 9/28/2016
I know Danny was promoted to Captain, by why does that get him called DR. Fenton? You need to have a PHD or a doctorate, or some other degree like that, to be addressed as Doctor. Getting promoted to Captain shouldn't be the requirement necessary to be addressed as Doctor. Also, something occurred to me; you mentioned earlier in this chapter that Danny's body was in a state of suspended animation, so would that mean that his body didn't age for those five years he was stuck in the Ghost Zone? That's how I understand it and it would also be about the only way the muscles in Danny's body didn't atrophy after five years of not using them. If they had atrophied, Danny would have been completely incapable of walking and it also would have taken him way more than a month of physical therapy for him to be fit enough to return to work. Also, if his body was aging, the hair on his head and face would have grown really long and he probably would have died of dehydration and starvation. Basically my point is that Danny should physically still be 25. Overall, I enjoyed this story and I think you did a pretty good job with it.
Guest chapter 18 . 9/27/2016
You do you realize you had Johnson say, "a small fraction of Daniel's DNA has SOMEHOW found its way into his body," about Danny's BIOLOGICAL SON, right? Of course Andy has Danny's DNA, otherwise he couldn't be Danny's biological son! I'm not trying to sound mean, but that really seems like a "No duh" thing to me.
Guest chapter 5 . 9/27/2016
You do realize that if Danny returned to Amity Park only four years after he graduated high school, that would mean he was only 22, not 25 like you were saying in the previous story, right? I'm also pretty sure it would take longer than four years for him to not only get accepted into NASA, but also to have been working there for a while, considering he would have had to go through college during that time, and I know it takes a lot of school and training to even be considered for NASA.
Guest chapter 3 . 9/27/2016
The previous story made it seem like Danny and Sam said "I love you" AFTER they slept with each other. Considering that's a rather big move, especially after four years of no contact, I don't think Danny and Sam would have slept with each other without both of them at least having confessed their love to each other.
Guest chapter 32 . 5/20/2015
What is your next story after the mystery of the spirit gems called
Sarcasm3 chapter 9 . 12/26/2014
I'm not sure about what the clue could POSSIBLY be, even though my best friend has been missing for five years. Not a CLUE!
esoulix chapter 2 . 2/11/2014
***THE FEELS ARE/IS(?) KILLING ME***
AwesomeRiana chapter 32 . 1/9/2014
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Stewiacker chapter 32 . 9/2/2013
Ok this has been an incredible story.
Including the first one to this series. I read both of these within a 36 hr period lol. Maybe even fasterthan that...
Either way this was great and I cant wait to read more
Ps I am 21 lol
IWouldDeleteIfIcould chapter 1 . 3/15/2013
I love this story. It's beautiful. I like the way that you have Sam miss Danny without falling apart and your OCs are so developed. I love Andy! He's so cute. I love the moment at the end where he's standing in front of Danny like he's just won the lottery. I have read your other DP stories and I'm wondering if you're going to post any more. I would love to read what happens to Andy, Sam, and Danny. Thanks for writing this so wonderfully! I mean every word I'm writing. Thanks again!
Shiro Inutoko chapter 21 . 1/23/2013
Ok, I'm a little confused here. A couple chapters ago when Danny came out of the portal, he was in human form. But now you're saying he's still full ghost! What's up? Is this deliberate, did you just want to be dramatic, or is it somehow related to the fourth gem? If it wasn't a mistake you need to clear that up, because the confusion is distracting me from the story.
NitenGale chapter 3 . 1/16/2013
Okay, it's been a while since this has been completed so there's not much chance of this having any relevance now, but I need to say it:

1) Why is Sam's kid 5yo? If she gave birth to him 8mo after Danny disappeared and it's been five years since his disappearance, the kid can't be older than 4yrs, 4 months

2) So Sam and Danny got it on, but didn't actually kiss until the big one a full month later, immediately before the fight with the GK? Yeah, that makes a lot of sense _
LandofMidnightRain chapter 32 . 9/8/2012
I love how you wrote this. Andy seemed very much like a young boy, instead of a 10 year old trapped in a 5 year old body. Good job on that front!
MidnightRain
Pheek chapter 32 . 9/2/2012
Great fic! Simply stunning! I love how developed your OCs are. Not many authors who make OCs are able to use them without them becoming Mary-sues, Gary-sues, or end up with an eve changing personality. Yours, on the other hand, are developed enough to make me believe they were actually in the show. From the villains to Johnson and to my personal favorite, Andy.

I can't wait to see what you have enstore for us readers in the next adventure!
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