| Reviews for Indulgence: Follow the Chaos! |
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Victoria1676 chapter 7 . 5/14 I'm loving this story so much! |
Guest chapter 7 . 4/9 aaaaaa I really love this! I hope you continue this :(( |
Guest chapter 7 . 3/4/2018 FUCK THOSE WHO ATTEMPTED TO RAPE TSUNA WE WILL KILL THOSE GUYS RIGHT REBORN GIOTTO AND DINO AND ALSO GIOTTO HOW DARE YOU IGNORE TSUNA UNFORGIVABLE BUT IF YOU START TO MAKE UP FOR IT TODAY ILL FORGIVE YOU MAKE SURE MUKURO AND DAEMON HIBARI AND ALAUDE HAVE THE THINGS READY FOR WHEN WE TORTURE THOSE PEOPLE WHO TRIED TO RAPE TSUNA MWAHAHAHAHA THEY ARE GOING TO DIE PAINFULLY AND SLOWLY |
Mindmaze chapter 4 . 12/12/2017 Ah! I love it when I read a story and I can visibly see how the author has progressed as a writer! This chapter was brilliant! The scenes were a lot easier to follow and your writing flowed more (if that makes sense), I got a sense of clarity that had been missing previously and I felt like you finally hit your strife with this. Anyways I really enjoyed reading this chapter, no complaints subject or objective so yes, well done, a solid chapter, glad I stuck around! |
Mindmaze chapter 3 . 12/12/2017 Hmmm, well i's good. You confused me at the beginning though. You implied Tsuna from his thoughts anyways wouldn't me instantly friendly to his brother, that he wasn't that kindhearted and yet his every outward action implies the opposite such as giving him the rose. Plus even though you wrote "he wasn't very fond of his older brothers love" outwardly he still accepted the hair ruffle and even blushed which gives mixed messages to the reader. Hell I bet Giottto has no clue his brother isn't fond of him still, I certainly wouldn't in his place. If Tsuna feels that way something along the line of "Tsuna tensed at the feel of his brothers fingers as they ran through his hair not sure how to feel about this new development" or "Giotto froze in his actions as he noticed Tsuna shifting uncomfortably under his hand, it seemed he wasn't as forgiven as he'd thought. It was bittersweet that for once it was he and not Tsuna being the naive one, he should know to expect this but he couldn't help but want more..." so on as a subtle approach if you thought it wa to rebelious and ooc for Tsuna to announce these thoughts. Because we see no resistance from Tsuna, no indication to let his brother know he is moving to fast or that despite being forgiven the past is not forgotten and they actually need to know each other first which makes the whole thing very odd to read when you have his thought process indicating otherwise. Still the fact you made the attempt at this is still pleasing to see, and your very good at writing the cast in character, even though I did feel a bit lost a parts from the jumpy paste you had with each encounter. I mean it was good in the fact it helped relate to Tsuna's "everything's moving to fast/confused/lost) experience but on the other hand I think you need to be careful bot to loose focus of what the purpose of it is what it adds to the story. I'm guessing you'll elaborate on the crazyness/mystery of the gang your setting up but I'll have to keep reading. Anyways as a follow up to the last chapter it is very good. |
Mindmaze chapter 2 . 12/12/2017 Ergh, Iwant Tsuna and his brother to get on but for some reaon this instant fogiveness is bothersome. I mean it's in character for Tsuna but blimey it irks me, well at least I didn't have to read the bad treatment which makes it easier to accept. I just, I'd expect Tsuna to at most accept him as he is now but remain distant, not instant fuzzys like the last line implies. I think it would be more satisfying to see them build up a relationship rather than instant bonding solely because their family. But who knows maybe you plan to go that way, either way this is a good start and you me intrigued to see where you take this. I am curious why his brother if he really didn't care for Tsuna's feeling previously suddenly had this change of heart, what was the catalyst |
blichigo chapter 1 . 7/18/2017 oh god i hope this gets updated. i know its been like 5 years but one can hope |
Guest chapter 7 . 3/30/2016 No chapter eight?!NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO~! ...That's it. That's all I have to say. |
Yhaelle-chii chapter 7 . 12/22/2015 Okay...this is too intense or nerve-wrecking...I still can't figure out what kind of AU is this?(sorry, I rarely read the whole author's note)...Do characters in this fic use magic instead of flames? Waaahhh...I need to know awesome fic by the way! Hail you and your awesome brain! Hoping for a new chapter soon :) |
Darkness7913 chapter 7 . 6/9/2015 OMG... Pls for heaven's sake don't discontinue this story.. especially now in the truth or dare part! I'm like the love! 1827, A27 and F27 pls! I love the brotherly D27 and D18... I wonder what type of jealousy Giotto is feeling though.. Tsuna you're easily molested! |
MangoPeanutSituation chapter 3 . 1/24/2015 You could just make Daemon's weapon a spear... That way it can open up to more arguments between him an Mukuro about whether one pointed or three pointed weapons are better |
Do2jr chapter 7 . 1/15/2015 Please update ! I love this story! |
AnimeLover chapter 7 . 9/13/2014 Awesome! I can't wait to read the next chapter! XD Why does Hayato call Tsuna 'Tenth'? Isn't Giotto the boss? Hope you up date soon! P.S. Giotto was a bit OOC... But I don't mind! XD |
Guest chapter 7 . 5/19/2014 Finish please! Is wonderful! |
Pedobearlikesyaoi1234 chapter 7 . 4/1/2014 ohmy glob please update! i just can't get enough! |