Honestly i think it started very well but as it went on it didn't really keep my attention. It seemed like a high schooler wrote it which is why the writing style did not keep my focus but props for making so long.

oh my goodness! JACOB asking JASPER for Help!? Ironic, much? But I DID figure that Mia would end up being Jacob's imprint; and she is making him dance to HER tune! Perfect!

love this book so far

Good Job...

The end is so sweet. I wouldn't have forgiven Alice quite so easy though. But, hey, Bella's always been way too forgiving! :-)

Oh, to read a fanfic by an author who understands the proper use of grammer, punctuation, and spelling! So refreshing! Authors who write with clear language and proper spelling seem to be few and far between, but they're always good. You are no exception. I love the story so far. I chuckled at the thought of Edward beating Jasper in any sort of fight. The thought is laughable. I guess Bella doesn't know our Jasper well enough to know otherwise yet. Looking forward to reading the rest!

Love the twins sooooo much. I also love Mia.

I love the characters you created-shocking, normally OC are boring or seem unnecessary-Mia did at first, but not anymore.

I like Amy's attitude-I also like Mia's.

Firkin-best word ever

Jacob made me LOL.

I agree-very fun to watch.

The punch was one of my fav. moments in the story.

Mia-strange

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Yay for hearing voices-but I hate when they make sence.

This story has the potential to be good, but there is a lack of substance and the writing is so choppy that it really gets boring. The speed of the story is to fast and the emotions of the characters just feels too immature to be realistic.