"Raucous sound," very powerful command of the English language and very gripping. Don't get discouraged by how long some stories take to write, you can't rush art! :)

I didn't catch any overused words or grammatical errors, and so far it looks like it's shaping up to be a good read. Good job!

I think you are a good writer, because I love Roxas but by the end of the chapter I absolutely HATED him. You've done well :) I will keep reading!

You have a way with making beautiful stories. I swear, if you do not become an author soon, I shall be heartbroken. I love this story, and it brought tears to my eyes and heart wrenching feelings, and I felt for Roxas, understood his pain. It was like you made everything so real, so vivid in my mind, and I felt for the characters.

I might be over exaggerating, but I don't think I am.

Plus, I love baseball.

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Thank you so much for writing this! It was amazing and beautiful.

This was seriously amazing! You are a freaking genious because both this and Spotlight are two of the best fics I've ever read! I mean I can't even begin to explain how awesome your stories are! I absolutely love each and every one of your characters just like in spotligh. Again I adore your Roxas, because I can totally see him being like that, pushing people away without meaning to and just being completely broken on the inside. And Axel was such a big sweetheart in this story, there were so many AWW moments! Love it!

great story

This story was great and the ending was fantistic. I love how you wrote it and it is just amazing!

Yet again your story has me staying up really late to finish :) you seem to be making a habit of that XD but anyway amazing story :D i reckon you could easily write an amazing sequal for this and if you are if you wanted i would be more than happy to put ideas in your amazing writing head XD loved it :) and always remeber that YOU are an amazing writer xxx :D

I really love this fic! I'm whythesunsetsred slash xrupertandme on tumblr, and I just wanted to come here and reiterate that I really liked your fic, and I'm sorry if my opinions hurt your feelings or twisted my feelings for the fic. I really do like it! I think you did a great job with it! But I think I've exploded your ask box on tumblr enough, so I won't rant again here! :)

Again, great job and I'm sorry!

Katie

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I was reluctant to read this story in the past when it was still ongoing because I'm not a fan of baseball. But it recently got submitted to my KH quality stories blog on tumblr, and I decided to give it a chance.

I was silly to not give it a chance beforehand, because I enjoyed it so much. It was easy for me to relate to Roxas' character, what with my hate for change. But it gives me hope to read the progression of his personality in this story.

I also really enjoyed your characterization, as well as the unique bonds you created with various characters (such as Riku and Zack) It's always refreshing to see something unique, not to mention you did a good job of making it realistic and believable.

Oh and can I just say that I love you for including Kairi and not making her some super bitchy, overly-girly-girl? Props for that.

So yes, this was a wonderful read. Thanks for that. C:

Honestly, I teared up when Roxas ran away. So good ]

I just finished reading this and I have to say I loved it. There were a lot of things I liked about this story. I think the main thing I liked was feeling a connection with the characters. Feeling happy when they were, that twisting feeling in your gut when something goes wrong. Awesome job! I'm def going to check out your other story. A coincidence that made me smile was while reading was that The Boys of Summer started playing out of a thousand plus songs on my ipod. ]

I absolutely adored this whole story. A lot of people can't really pull off the first person narrative kind of story but you had me feeling a lot of the familiar emotions from the excitement to the dread to the embarrassment and just about everything in between. I truly enjoyed this story and devoured it within hours.

You are a really good writer, don't forget it. I loved reading this story. I love kingdom hearts and baseball too. I can definitely tell that you spent a lot of time on Roxas' character. It was a very job well done. No joke. I love the fact that you wanted to give your story a certain point to it. I loved it so much, I copied some of the things you said in here for quotes. I'm going through quite a bit of changes myself right now, and reading this story has helped me feel a little bit more at ease. Thank you for sharing this story.

roxas was such i jerk! grrr, i wanted to cry for axel, no doubt that was a very low blow!