Great writing. Would love to see more.

It's great, but why is it in bold? it makes it a bit stark on the background.

I love the description, and the description of the blood is just fantastic, you can really imagine it! You use brilliant words but you've stuck 'he is not' together, although I think you might know that!

Thanks for submitting it, it was fun to read (even if it was just a paragraph) and your writing style is just awesome!

Kikwoka x

waa! the latest chappy wanted to make me cry

but im glad Ace's and Luffy's past is gonna come! :D

and i loved this! it really shows how lu reacted in the latest chapter...

I know by experience how hard it is to squeeze anything into scant couple hundred words and still have it retain meaning. (ok, I didn't count the words, but guessing roughly, it should be thereabouts)

But nice work!