WHAT! NEJI AND GAARA! WHAT?! NOW KAKASHI AND IRUKA!? Well I do ship KAKASHI and iruka even though they haven't talked once in the anime.

the first was so sad I'm crying, is this one ganna be worse?

So touching. Makes me cry. Love it!

*sniff, sniff* ugh i'm almost fucking crying after reading this (and its really hard to make me cry) ugh fuck it *starts bawling crying* i love it though

You could always just use Microsoft Word...

But look, if you need someone to analyze grammar, I can help you a lot. I just finished my A.P. tests too, and understand your difficulties. I'm already Betaing a few stories, one more isn't going to be a haul for me, especially since I haven't recieved anything to correct yet.

Looking forward to seeing the next chapter.

~Zoran

Such creativity and imagination. Excellent setting of mood. Short chapters, yes. I would suggest enriching detail to help lengthen them.

I hope you post more chapters soon. These are entertaining and pleasing.