Your grammar is deplorable.
Commas exist, please use them.
Your grasp of certain words is lacking.
Dinner. Definitely.
Please learn them.

Also, in what world would an inexperienced virgin deep throat a c*ck her first go? That scene, at least Bella's bit, was utterly revolting.

I overlooked much, but the slur at the end of the chapter sealed the deal.

Hola que lastima que no haz terminado está historia, me encanta quisiera saber cómo fue la vida de jasoer y bella y que hacen ahora. Espero la termines, saludos de una fans

Great story! Thank you!

This was great!

I love this story its awesome that last line though cracked me up... kudos for including it...

Lots of grammar errors, misspellings and punctuation problems in this story

Also how dope would it be if she could make vampire combustCuse id want that as a power fuck any other power no one would ever mess with you

I reeeeeeally wish he would have yelled “is there no one else”!?

Every intro it feels like you're yelling at me but I like your story so it's okay

Thank you for taking the time to write this sweet story. I am a fan of the Bella and Jasper story lines.

Absolutely loved this! It's better every time I read it!

I like the story so far but, your use of incorrect words like passed, not past makes it hard to read. It seems a waste to put so much effort into a story and not go back and correct the errors.

Yay! Marcus rules the Volturi while Aro, Caius and the doublemint twins are ashes!

Your grammar is fucking horrible. You don't use punctuation, you confuse pronouns... I am having trouble reading this

A slam dunk of an adventure.

The bad guys got it in the end or as in this case, the epilogue.

Thank you for sharing your madly talented writing skills and your precious time.

Totally enjoyed your Jasper and Bella with the side of Petey-pie & his Char...Oh okay, with the Cullen's and the spritz of the Denali's, too.

Excellent story and a Fan-tastic job! Kudos to you, Caseylynn.
Take Care and Happy Writing,
CentauRita, NorCal Gal