hiccup smirking at his girlfriend your poor scrawny viking really nice to know how you really feel ow astrid smirking at her boyfriend hiccup haddock maybe this will keep you quiet kissing my dragon boy

awww

that was awesome
Draco122

Aww, loved it.:)

I liked your story, and I love the movie two. Hiccup and Astrid sooo belong together, don't you think?

Love the movie too!

Awww! that was so cute! Hiccstrid forever!

catz4eva101

Dawwwwwww! That was adorable! Great job!

awww...I love this! please write more hiccup and astrid stories soon!

okay am I only the only one that wants to laugh with joy? Probably. This was so well done, absolutely adorable! Your paragraphs are pretty long and for future references I wouldn't make big paragraphs, the reader might loose their place and let me tell you some people won't read a story if they can't find their place. Anyways this was really well done, love it! :D

The beginning was kinda confusing cuz you switched from "She" to "I" but after that it was fine. Nice and cute!

wow i loved this movie and this story

:)

i loved that part where she hits and kisses him and he said "i could get use to it"

classic and i was wondering if u want to write a story with me i am up for anything :/

if u want to

The change of narrative person at the beginning is not fluid.

The rest is very good, I like to read scenes from the movie story itself.

awwwwwwwwwww i saw it last night along with iron man 2 at hte drive in, i like this one waaaaaaaaay better

I think this is a definite "aw" piece. ) My only critique would be that you do use too much focus on the cliche thoughts that are typically brought to mind when writing a situation like this one.

That aside, I think you could use the "My Hiccup" thing a little more to emphasize (not necessarily that Hiccup is hers) so much as why she has become so close to him. Investigate those details and I think this piece could shine more than it already does. )

Overall this was short and sweet. Nicely done. )

Best,

-Don "QuixoticQuest" _