Very nice!

I love it!

I know it's cannon (kind of), but Bellamort has always creeped me out. But this story is great. The lyrics are absolutely perfect, and you pack so much emotion into 500 words and one moment of time. Fantastic.

Excellent! I enjoyed reading this. I particularly liked this idea of a phantom in Bellatrix’s head saying what she truly thought and wanted to do... I got the impression that the lyrics were this phantom in Bellatrix’s head were her true thoughts and the things that she wanted to conceal from her master. However, he knew anyway because I assume that he saw it within her mind and he complied.

I loved your opening describing the phantom and almost as if it was possessing Bellatrix, and it was something that she couldn’t control. I liked this line: “Haunted by a terrible phantom that engulfed her thoughts.” As it is a really nice image and represents this idea of her subconscious which I have said previously. A really nice descriptive line too! :D
The way you presented Voldemort here was fantastic! It is evident that you thought about how he would say things and such..

A typical Bellatrix line which shows her dedication towards her master:
"I do not need a reward my Lord. There is no greater pleasure than serving you,"
I think that here Bellatrix wants the reward, but she is afraid to say which goes back to the phantom inside her head controlling her inner-most thoughts. That was a nice link back to your beginning..

The kiss at the end is a nice touch, not only because it is a sense of Bellamort, but because it shows how Voldemort is using her and I guess a bit of a reminder that she is below him, and I think that Voldemort makes that very clear with: "You do not see the thing you most desire is a way to serve your master."

Fantastic work... A typo or two crept in there though, but I am 100% sure that you didn’t mean them to creep in there..

A great drabble which I enjoyed reading! Very unique and the Bellamort-ness just added to the interesting idea.

Amazing work!
-Sarah x

I haven't read anything by you in a while, Caitlin, but I really enjoyed this. Everyone seemed very IC throughout, and it was really nicely executed - Bella's apprehension, and the way Voldemort toys with her, before deciding to reward her - but only because it serves his own ends, which is, I think, very Voldemort.

And I like that Bella seems under no delusions about what her master thinks and feels - even at this point, when she's still "Bellatrix Black". She doesn't seem to hope he'll love her in return, or anything foolish like that - she just states her love for him as it is in her mind, and hides it as best she can from him. And it seems appropriate that the fire and passion in the kiss seems to come all from her side. (I'm not sure if you wrote it like that but it's certainly how I read it.)

Love the jaw trace, obv . . . *coughs*. And the kiss.

Nice work!

Very interesting. Good work! D

I LOVE IT! The lyrics are BEYOND perfect, you fit them so well into her thoughts that they might as well have been dialogue or additional narration, they were not distracting at all, instead, they built the story and amplified the affects of her mental hesitance. I love that she thinks asking for even a simple kiss would be selfish and much too bold, but he assures her it would please him too. You always write Bellamort so well. Please say you'll write more soon, PLEASE? LOVE. -Lia.

LOVE THIS! I am one hundered percent a Bellamort shipper now! You've done it! I love them and this was just...my favorite line is..."Bellatrix was not a fool, so she never said the words that the phantom in her heart whispered. She realised she could never say them to him." Poor Bella, unrequited love is just so...uh... She loves him so, but he can never return it. Great way to stay in character for both. Oh and the lyrics...perfect!

I loved this so much, so beautiful

Ahh! I love this. It's so Bellamort! It seems very in-character for both of them, and I especially like that Bellatrix realizes that Voldemort can't love. And the kiss being both a reward for Bella and a way for her to serve him - very in-character for both of them.

8D YES! Ahahaa, love it! Definitely the happiest moment of Bella's life. You're great with suspense, I was on the edge of my seat by the end of it. 3

Very great fic. The song you choose is perferct too

omg. i luv ur idea. you left me hanging, off a cliff. post next chapter soon!