so cute :)

You, my dear, are a very talented writer.

Your characterisation is accurate, I could imagine them acting in such a way canonically. Your writing is impressive and elegant, much better a huge lot of the hundreds of authors, published and not, that I have came across. Your descriptions are enough to give you a vivid picture of what is going on but not too much that it feels like you are just shoving your thesaurus given skill to my face. You also just add humour subtly and casually that it ends up being really funny without trying too hard or being cheap. You also have the ability to tug at heart strings and have a flair for writing short, endearing and non cheesy romances.

That is my thoughts for all of your stories.

Now for this one, I must say, I have not read plenty of these, the type I mean. I have read a handful of stories written in the second person point of view and they were just awkward to read. Not because you are incorporated to the story but because the writing was just less than stellar, constantly messed with the tenses, the flow gets disrupted and such. But this was an absolute pleasure to read. It was as if I've been accustomed to this type of story my whole life o have been able to read it pleasantly at ease.

And about Arthur, he was so endearing! I loved how you described him and brought him to life. I loved how real and in character he was despite being AU. Most authors hav a defect with keeping them in character even if it isn't au. I loved his short dialogues and his response to everything. The cock was very funny, haha!

Wow. I actually wrote a comprehensible review. This is a first. I have more to say about this, I could fawn over it the whole day but I believe I don't know how to string my words anymore.

You are a vastly underrated writer and you deserve more recognition. You write better than most of the ones here with the most reviews.

I hope to see more of those from you but about other characters.

Thank you so much for taking the time to write such a wonderful fic!

You are one of my favourites.

Why does this have only 3 reviews?

This is a well written fic. More than that actually. The way you stitch words together, the short yet memorable dialogue, the descriptions... Wow, really. I love this so much! You did an great job and hope to find more stories like this!

I can't believe I didn't discover you until recently. And I am affronted that no one has discovered this little jewel of a story.

You are a brilliant writer - and I mean that, from the bottom of my heart. Let it be known that I rarely compliment authors because I feel that everyone always has room to improve. But your stories...they just blow me away. I've read all of your works, and you really have a gift in dialogue, humor, and the uncanny ability to make me want to laugh and weep after reading your stories. There is always so much to learn in your stories as well, be it Blackpool or English slang or tidbits from films or car boot sales. You make USUK seem so much more...believable when you write.

For this piece in general, I love the 2nd person POV, and I think you've captured America and England's personalities spot on. Especially the last line...oh my goodness, I can't even tell you how much that squeezed my heart. See, here come the happy tears again.

Please, whenever you can, keep writing about this pairing. It physically pained me when I realized I had finished reading all your stories. I will loyally devour any of your works because they are *that* amazing. I wish you a future full of acclaim and reviews. :)

All the best - have a wonderful day!

Kisses,

WingsofRain

This short story was . . . so heartwarming. I love your characterization of Arthur so much, and the bit about the crossword puzzle made me laugh. XD He just seems so real - like you could walk down the street and meet someone just like him. Makes my heart ache to know that that's not going to happen. . . .

And I love your use of second-person POV, by the way. I haven't seen a lot of it on FF, and in the few instances that I have, it wasn't very well done. But you pulled it off nicely. Gives off kind of a movie effect, doesn't it? :D Thanks for writing this!

Okay, wow. Wow. Really? Really now, FFNet? Not a single review? Not one? o.O

I am stunned and a little bit affronted that this hasn't gotten a single review in the whole almost-two-years it's been up here. I hope you won't think I'm patronising you or anything - I am honestly just like... wow. Really?

This is a little gem, I have to say. But before I praise it, I have to recount the "funny story" that led me to it. I have read another of your fics, a long time ago, which to be honest I think I'll have to review after this. You live in Britain too - I can see that by both your profile and the way you write. There are subtle little nuances of British life in your turn of phrase. I'm British too (I live in Cardiff and went to university in Birmingham) so I can tell. I'm not sure if you frequent BBC3 at all but it shows some hilarious, clearly low-budget stuff, one of their newer offerings something called 'Bizarre Crimes'. Well, I was watching it last night when it was too much effort to reach for the control and change the channel and I was suddenly reminded of your fic where Arthur hits repeatedly on policemen while drunk. I don't know WHY, exactly, but I was - and I couldn't remember who wrote it so today I googled in the hopes of finding it and lo and behold! there it was. So I reread it, enjoyed it, and then I had another little look at your profile because I don't think I've ever read anything else by you and bam! here we are. I was actually intrigued by this by both the summary/promise of second person POV (rare but usually a winner if done right!) and the very fact that it had no reviews.

ANYWAY. Enough of that boring story. I really really like the way you write Arthur - I think you give him a certain realistic earthiness that comes with being British yourself. I get really sick of reading fics where people who clearly have clue about Britain write him all... stereotypical, like he calls Alfred a git every two sentences, etc. I mean, I know Hetalia IS stereotypical and that's part of its charm but I do wish people would put in a little more effort, you know? With this it sort of feels like he's a real person, and I think it works even better that you did it from Alfred's (sort of?) POV. There's this kind of gentle reveal about it. :) You did a nice job of fleshing modern!Arthur out, in his polo shirt with the turned-up collar, just... I don't know. It seems so comfortable and unclassy and honest. Everything about this, really - the title sort of sums it up. It's unglamorous, you know - Arthur misses his mouth and ends up with egg on his face, you mentioned the fact that he's clean-shaven (because NOT everyone is Japanese - European men have to shave if they don't want facial hair, little fangirls!), it's all just very... honest, as I said. This is how it is - and this is how comfortable they are together.

I also like the cutaway narrative technique - like this is a little tiny snippet of a much larger picture. There are a lot of unanswered questions, like why they're having breakfast in this gross little establishment in the first place, why they're in casual dress, etc. Are they on business? At the end of a meeting? On holiday? I just find it very interesting that it's so very cryptic. I think that's definitely part of its charm, I must say!

I enjoyed Arthur's crossword technique, btw. XD

Anyway, enough of my rambling. I just wanted to let you know my thoughts on this. It's really wonderful. I'm so sad no-one else appears to have paid it any heed. It's really one of the best observations of the human, humdrum, real life side of the USUK relationship I've yet seen. :)

I'll have to have a look at your others - the Blackpool one intrigues me. I went to Blackpool once. NEVER AGAIN.

RR xXx