I loved it!

Good.

Why not great? The trivial things. Some spelling and grammar mistakes here and there, and a few quotes not expanded upon enough.

Almost got me to favorite it. Keep it up.

This was a cute story. I kind of felt sorry for Misty though, it kinda felt like she still had a thing for Ash in this story because they went fishing together. and it sucks that she has to go out with that loser Tracey.

Aww, nice one!

It felt a little like it was in the anime, that's probably how Ash would've done if he ever was in that sort of situation

great chapter I just wished you posted this beofre valentine's day because this would of been a great addition to read. I hope you keep it up Kazama the shell bullet.

that was a great story! cute and romantic!