This is by far the best! Fan fiction I have read in a long, long, long, long time! You have an awesome writing ability! The only criticism I have for it is that it’s not done! so if you have some spare time please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, update soon! thank you

Youve come this far why not stick to it?

Wow, what an original take on this story. I love Nal, what a stunning character. It has kept me hooked, couldn't stop until I had read all of the chapters (just come across this story). It's on my favourites and I can't wait for the next instalment. Love the interaction between Nal and Alistair. Also I would keep it to glaive, seems to make sense.

gah!

i hate cliffhangers

lol, love this though

keep up the good work

Glaive does seem more fitting as there really doesn't seem to be many Japanese themes in DA. Also there isn't an option of saying Nal grew up somewhere remote that was more Japanese themed as she was raised by the wardens. So I believe it's best to use the word Glaive for her weapon.

Also I'd just like to point out that "Yari" means spear, I believe, "Naginata" is the proper Japanese word for a glaive.

Personally, I think you should keep it as a glaive. It fits with the whole theme, as you said, and it would just be simpler for you, haha.

I do love this story. It's a shame no one has reviewed this chapter since you posted it. I'm not usually a huge fan of AU, even as slight as this one is. But I really like your OC. She's very original and her personality is very believable. Please keep writing!

I have to say, this is one of the most amazing OC I've ever read of! And the dialogue is terrific! I'm so impressed! I can't wait to read more!

wooo love it!i havent read a story like your before and ive got to say its awesome..hope you keep up with the story because you have an avid reader

What an interesting story. Well written, too. I like how Nali really doesn't trust anyone - except those wardens she grew up with, and Cailan. Loghain's dislike for the girl was painfully obvious, although it almost seemed to me more brother-sister comradery between her and Cailan than anything else.

Alistair's mistrust of her is perfectly logical. I'm gonna guess Mat is a Cousland, although you've never said what he is - human, elf, mage, warrior, rogue. Zev, of course, is true to form.

Looking forward to more.

Amazing chapter. I love it how you describe Naliana's dragon eye. Plus part where the demon taking the diguise that man and she was left tramitized afterwards is very well written. All in all a great story so far.

Update please!

I wonder who the man was, her dad maybe? anyway I like it more please:)

I find this totally original and itriguing. I hope you add more to it because I really like it:)

This is a really great story. I mean, it's only the fourth chapter and I do believe I'm hooked.

I haven't found a spelling or grammar error yet, which is always a really awesome thing. One of the biggest things I look for in a good story, actually. The whole thing flows so well and the Dragonspawn idea is very original, also things I look for. You've also got the characters well in-character, even though most of it has been from the game.

All in all, I look forward to the next chapter. You should update. Soon. Very soon.

Oh! By the way, you know the four boxes when you review? I've checking them all. :D

Awesome... keep going.

oh i've been waiting for updates to this story.

Nice chapter.

I like Nal and her sort of kinship with Leliana. I love the bard to despite her Maker fetish. Good thing you can harden her! 8D