what the? ha ha..

aww, that was sad. i would like if you made it into something longer, like with linger chapters. you have a great idea. i liked it lotss

wtf! they're gonna fight while she's pregnant!

wha tha hel!

...from virgin bride to 2 possible fathers

wow she screwed up

...

!_!

...so much for bein a virgin bride

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Boo-hoo.

creepy how I knew what was going to happen, I even loaded the gun XD I actually wasn't expecting Charisei to shoot herself... I just knew someone was gonna shoot themselves...

Over all, you oughta work on developing it more, it was too shallow and shiney. Like a glint of light that keeps hitting you in the eyes like an annoying peice of crap that it is. The plot itself was okay, just needed to be developed better.

Other than that. Nice Shiney Bang Bang!

O-o sad eh? *loads bullets into Shiney bang bang* I already had a feeling.

Coma... Kenpachi...? PFFT Lets draw on his face! *pulls out sharpies*

XD I almost choked on my mountain dew... I was listening to that song... let the bodies hit the floor by drowning pool when i was reading this, and apparently her ring tone went off and was the same... VERY weird Coinkidink...

Naw dipshit Yamamoto, it's the unborn twins. XD

yeah... still reading even if this is getting corney.

O-o

*quails* OMG lame XD funny but lame

Makes me wonder why I keep reading it... maybe its because it's funny XD

O_o wait... if she's prego... then how the hell is she gonna be a virgin bride...

btw... this was all the Shiney of the Shiney Bang Bang...

compleatly honest: If my friend game me a list like that she got from someone and I worked on the newpaper... Whos ever list that is would be absolutly DOOMED.

BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

*is evil*

XD that was the corniest hug scene ever XD and It was halarious