This was sweet. The ending was simply perfect.

hmmmm norribeths... not bad, but ooc for elizabeth if you ask me.

Even in a piece as short as this, you managed to embed a lovely story arc that leaves us wanting and hoping for the moment when all will be right between the pair.

Very well written and an easy read that drew me onward through to the end to find out what happened.

Nicely done!

I thought this was adorable :)normally, i don't like norribeth pairings but this was really good! Keep writing!

TheTudorWife

Great job. It was sweet.

I’ve always had a soft spot for James. Of everyone in trilogy, I think he’s the most misfortune.

The ‘not now’s and ‘not yet’s had me in a dilemma. I didn’t know whose side I was supposed to be on! Since the piece was written using first person narrative, I subconsciously sided with Elizabeth; but truth be told, my heart reached out for poor James. Hypocrite? No better word. I think it’s wonderful you make us sit on the fence. :)

‘I stared at his back until it came light outside, but the world did not brighten in my heart, only my eyes.’ – I do love the poetic vibe. It makes the story very dream-like.

‘It shone beautifully in the white light and I wondered why something so pretty could not win my love.’ – A bit of constructive criticism: add a comma before the conjunction that joins the two clauses (two parts of a sentence that can be read logically as two separate sentences). Everything else seems fine. :)

I’m glad you guys came up with this challenge. Eleven other stories, you say? Where are they? I’m really looking forward to reading them. :D

MsAurora

Now that was a story worth waiting for. You always write Elizabeth so well. As alternate universes go I think this one was very well imagined. I especially liked how she described the drawer full of trinkets.

“No, I simply don’t need them.”

A lot was said with those few words.

Very well done!