Florence is a friggin queen. I love Chess for the deplorable, overly complex mess it is (even some of the A awkward lyrics). Also, we may be old enough to recall that cold war stuff. :)

I'm convinced that Chess is a fave of those capable of thinking in mixed metaphors. Others may hate it, but it's such a delight. I love it when Florence is played with the appropriate level of spite (so LOTS) and I suspect yours has her fair share!

Yes. I love this. You capture Florence (at least my interpretation of her) perfectly.

She had been dormant long enough. Somewhere, a star exploded, a bomb went off, and a window shattered.

And Florence walked out.

I loved that last bit.

Very well done. This was very in-character. You described both Florence and Freddie the way they were portrayed in the play.

I think this expresses the rather confusing nature of Freddy and Florence's relationship very well. Your writing flowed well, etc.

Although, the last paragraph extra line seemed a little awkward.

But in general, a great job.