A most AWESOME Story:) It is Most Rare,Of Course,to see How our Macho Guys handle feelings and Stuff:) This is Very Good and Very Believable,also:) I would love to talk tp you and get some Writer Points:) I Love Dethklok and Writing,too:) please write me /MordhausMania:)

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The Little Maid,Chava,Loved the guys,but from afar:) As Klokateer in Training,she knew emotions were Usaually "on Hold" so to speak,but snice this last incident where Toki and Abagail,were stabbed and Taken,all the Band Realized,brutal was "out the Window".She wanted to let them know how she understood,and even dared to ask about was Very Kind,and actually smiled and said,"Well,If you really want to tell the boys how you feel,why not write or just start with each one,and just say it" So,Gathering her Will and Strengh,she started with Pickles."please .Lord Pickles,"She started out,May I Please talk to you? I Think I know how you all feel,and Pickles was a Liittle Taken aback,but said,half smirking," what you want already,Liitle Gal".Chava Gulped,then said,"I am in Love with You and the Band" Please May i hug you? She remined him of Toki just then,and so he let her hug She said,smiling,May I tell you a Story?The other guys came in at That Moment,and said ,Yeah go ahead,entertain She Began: (More Later)

WAHHHH!My Heart Really goes out,to Our Fave Brutal Boys:) I Just want to Hug them,and Kiss Them and Cry with Them,and say,"Look,I don't say,don't be Yourselves,but the the Beautiful People I see inside"! Don't be Ashamed,of Who You Truly are! I Love You:)

Such a Heartfelt,Wonderful Story,I would Actually Like to Read More ,Like This:)
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Ah, it's taken me forever to finally bring myself to make a review. I'd been trying to think of a good way to write this out, but by the time I did, life reared its ugly head, and so I had to wait. Sommore.

To be honest, this one actually wasn't my favorite chapter, although it was a very good one. It made me think of, as I've said before, how Toki is so childish. In most cases, however, it's not really that he acts as though he's infantile, it's that he's practically saturated with naivete, and manages to still keep an innocent feel about him, in spite of being a member of the most notorious and deadly metal band in the world. Up until the very end, where you mention how he remembers that everything he shows any sort of compassion for dies, he stays true to that child-esque behavior. I like how you'd let him break off just a little bit and still remain in character, as he was quite sad when it came to mind again. He didn't just brush it off, or make it seem that he had, as the other bandmates would. He's upright and honest about his feelings, although now he's realized he can't show care anymore, becasue as far as he knows, it's gotten Charles killed, too. Rather melacholic ending, but that was something I think you'd have intended for this kind of story. I think you did a great job, and I'd like to see more of your writing. Putting you on favorite authors and alert.

Dunno what you're talking about, cuz I found this to be totally in character. :)

Very nicely done. You had me enthralled!

I sort of found some grammatically strange (not wrong) things distracting me a little. Nothing major, I just stopped to reread a couple of lines deciding whether I liked the way you phrased it or not. Weird, right? Like you said "He's taken" where I would have said "He took." I like your style very much though, it interests me. :D

I liked this fiction a lot, and its believable on each member (and you got the way they talk right).

So, now that I'm done with classes for the semester (my finals start on Monday), I can leave a good review.

I thought this story was absolutely wonderful. The way each of them dealt with their grief was spot-on to their characters. I'm going to have to say that chapter 5 was my favorite chapter, no contest. Toki's always been my favorite.

You have a unique writing style. It's very refreshing to not have to decipher bad spelling and grammar just to read a story.

Personally, I believe you've nailed Pickles on the head. In the show he's the veteran of the whole rock scene, and would have a few comparisons to be able to make, so having him use the metaphors, even if the liqour makes him slosh them all together seemed fitting. Also, how he decided to have taken the depression and keep it away(drinking) was, obviously, a great idea; how he sat and practically bled it all out in his head while staring at the liqour cabinet was a nice touch, although... vodka? For some reason, I always have thought of him as more of a whiskey kinda guy. Oh well, just preferences, nevermind.

As for Murderface, I think you've characterized him well- his denial of softer emotion, utter refusal to call Charles by his real name, and the fact that he also seems to be taking even greater care of his knives than usual. But, if there were one thing I would complain about, it would be that Murderface's most well-known trait on the show is that he's got perhaps the dirtiest mouth of the cast. All I see him swear with hear is 'damn this' and damn that' and, although it isn't necessarily a bad thing that he didn't curse from left to right of the page(as it shows that you can get your point across without having to be so crude), it just would have seemed more 'in-character' to me.

Either way, I still think that your work is quite fantastic, and I applaud what you've done so far. I await Toki with much glee and anticipation...

I dont like Murderface either, but I think even he would admit to himself he was sort of sad Offdenson was gone. But yeah, you were pretty much spot on.

Looking forward to Toki's the most. He's my favorite member of the band besides Nathan.

I like how you're portraying the boys in various states of mourning. I especially liked Murderface's for some reason even though I'm not a big fan of his. It seems like something he would do. Looking forward to Toki's POV.

William was very very spot on. 3 The bit about Charles' room was sweet in his own dickish way.

I think u got murderface in character! He was a dick and it was all about him, but he DID care about the robot in his own way. Awesome!

Glorioous! More pleease, it's too good to leave it here. Toki's is sure to make me cry. 3

Its good.

"He isn’t drunk enough yet, so he can still taste the cheapness of the vodka when he slugs it back, the harsh rubbing alcohol taste and too-bitter burn."

I like that. It's true, lol.

Yay great story i look forward to Toki's part