I've done the same thing with those mini umbrellas. My brother laughed because all the istp's he knows would do the same and said that’s what he means by them being dorky.

Nakamaship is cute.

Awwww, I feel all warm and fuzzy now. The "weird" tone might be because you're writing in the present tense, which is pretty uncommon, rather than any thing being OoC or whatever.

Fight Sanji, untangle Luffy, take a nap. It was a good day. Har har!

I dunno, I liked the tone most of the time. Something has to go on in Zoro's head between all those naps ;)

First of all, I think this story is really well written and pretty in character for Zoro. It has a fairly more complex thought pattern for Zoro that I'm not used to seeing in other fanfic. I did like how he went to untangle Luffy and the whole conversation there. His thoughts about the others seem pretty in tune, too. My only quibble with that is referring to Robin as Nami's familiar. I mean, I know he's being pissy but Robin generally doesn't do anything to him- Unlike Nami.

You're right, though. The tone is off. But I think it's more of a case of lack of follow through. You have Zoro being annoyed at Sanji-really annoyed and this is important because usually they don't piss eachother off this much and he's slightly peeved at the rest of the crew due to cabin fever and then... and then nothing happens. He goes unknots Luffy.

I realize this story was written a long time ago, nevertheless, I think you can fix it by having Luffy saying something about Zoro's bad mood in the end. I think Luffy would notice...and giving him the idea to go make up or something like that. I'm not entirely sure.

All that being said, it's still a good story and your writing is really nice. :)

Tehehe, oh-so-wonderfully cute!

Starting from the very title and finishing on the very last line I couldn't help but think while reading how fucking fortunate I am to find this oneshot, the IC-ness is simply blinding and I feel so relaxed, happy and calmed at the same time after reading this piece, I seriously wish you could do more~

(Sanji's fault, for putting them in such an unstable position) (the maker's fault, for using slats instead of sensible blocks of wood)

THE BLAME GAME!

I was reading this again and then noticed that I never reviewed the first time I read it. It's really good. I love how the story goes but even more how easily you just sum up the group dynamics so subtly and in such a short time!

This is very wellwritten! You have such amazingly good choise of words and yet, the story is so easy to understand.

Another ordínary day on the Sunny, it turns out to be in the end. However, all the ruckus with Sanji in the beginning made me feel like it somehow was going to continue and then it didn't. Nma, it's not a big deal.

The story was relaxing in a way. It's allways nice to read about the Strawhats having just another "calm" day.

"‘cause that’s just Stupid" - This made my day! You captured Luffy's voice so well. Of course the S is capitalized. Wow, I mean, I can hear him say that in my head! Kudos and keep up the good work!

I loved it!

It was such a wonderful little piece. I love how you compared Nami and Robin to a witch and her familiar; brilliant! And the descriptions of Zoro slowly untangling Luffy were hilarious! I'm favoriting this; good job!