Maybe she's starting to respect my decisions, he thought to himself.

*smirks* Accept it, Booth. That will NEVER happen.

It was really cute! Good job ;-)

Very nicely done for a first story. You had a plot, with a goal in mind, and you reached that. Your grammar was very good as well. I'm a grammar nut, so I always appreciate that (can't stand when people don't take the time to spell check!). All in all, well done for a first time out.

One thing I would suggest is to add more details. Tell us more about the criminals, and the case. Another thing would be to add more depth of emotions to the characters, and also to really think about their reactions in the context of the story. By adding the details and emotions, it would greatly expand your plot, giving a more cohesive story line. Finally, when writing the actions of the characters, think about what would make sense. One thing that really stood out for me was Booth and Brennan driving off at the end. After being hit twice in the head, Bones would probably need some sort of medical attention.

All in all, this story shows a lot of potential, and I look forward to seeing more from you! Keep on writing!

this is great for the first fanfic. for your next you can write longer and try to capture emotions and the case in more detail.

very cute!