Lol. This seems to be a competition over who uses the major quantity of ineffective moves on the other 'mon!

Sure, it's mostly Ash in this case, but Snubull please Paul. I thought at least YOU would/should have known better to not do that!

Seriously, using Ice Beam on Monferno rather than a Water-type move? On another note, Poliwrath can learn Psychic?! I didn't know that.

Oh, and several Ashes? Isn't that a bit convoluted?

But oh well. There so few stories about the King of Pokélantis that I'm willing to ignore that. Keep writing!

Can you update please. I want to see what happens!

I think three Ash's is too much, but whatever. It's your story. And I see some good promise here. For the story's sake, I hope it wasn't Ash who said that last line.

Update soon.

Well as you can guess my OC's name is jonathan His pokemon are

Lulu

Pokemon:lopunny *shiny/pokerus*

attacks:charge beam, bounce, drain punch, and jump kick

stats: level 100

Atk 201

Def 234

SpAtk 144

SpDef 193

Spd 240

Ability Klutz *Pokemon can't use held items*

Sex: female

special: will constantly leave pokeball to hug her trainer

Lady Bee

Pokemon:Vespiquen *Shiny*

attacks:Captivate, attack order, swagger, destiny bond

stats: level 100

Atk 171

Def 334

SpAtk 209

SpDef 210

Spd 98

Ability pressure *Raises Foes pokemons PP useage*

Sex:Female

special: The crystal in her forehead is purple instead of the regular red

Chaos-Kun

Pokemon: Spiritomb

attacks:Nasty Plot, Sucker Punch,

Memento, and Dark Pulse

stats: level 100

Atk 194

Def 238

SpAtk 207

SpDef 225

Spd 89

Ability pressure *Raises Foes pokemons PP useage*

Sex: male

special: where it's green would normaly bee it's a deep rust color

yuki miko

Pokemon: Froslass

attacks: Ice shard, Hail, blizzard, destiny bond

stats: level 100

Atk 183

Def 163

SpAtk 155

SpDef 159

Spd 252

Ability Snow cloak *raises evasion in a snow storm*

sex: female

special: tends to throw blocks od ice at Lulu when she hugs Jonathan then hugs him herself

Titan

Pokemon: Snorlax

attacks: Block, rollout, crunch, and giga impact

stats: level 100

Atk 243

Def 135

SpAtk 146

SpDef 250

Spd 77

Ability thick fat *resistant to fire and ice-type moves*

sex: Male

special:eats alot but is allmost allways awake loves to dance and can destroy a house with his giga impact *Jonathan used this to earn some money demolishing houses*

luna

Pokemon: Cresselia

attacks: Psycho shift, Aurora beam, Future sight, and Psycho Cut

stats: level 100

Atk 145

Def 220

SpAtk 155

SpDef 291

Spd 175

Ability levitate

sex: Female

special: Jonathan hidden ace few know he even has a Cresselia

Jonathan also has two reserve pokemon

Ground Shaker

Pokemon: Torterra

attacks: Synthesis, Crunch, Giga drain, and Leaf Storm

stats: level 100

Atk 254

Def 219

SpAtk 179

SpDef 207

Spd 131

Ability Overgrow *powers up grass type moves in a pinch*

sex: Male

special: is blind but can feel the earths vibrations

Hanabi

Pokemon: Charmeleon

attacks: Fire Fang, Slash, Flame Thrower, and Fire Spin

stats: level 100

Atk 143

Def 133

SpAtk 151

SpDef 164

Spd 195

Ability Blaze *same as Overgrow but with fire*

sex: female

special: Refused to evolve into Charazard due to fear of heights

Jonathan

Age: 19

Reigion: kanto safforon city

sex: male

Hair color: Black

Eye color: Grey

cloths: basic psyscic trainer outfit But has thick swirly glasses *Think fawful's glasses* and wildly spiky hair

height six foot two

years of training 10

rank has defeated all gyms but never the champions

personality: science minded with a rough careing kind of person

Battle style: defend until he can find the pokemons weakness then focous on that

Pokemon call: "Moon shine down apon(Pokemons name)"

P.S. if luna isn't allowed then he has a phonie named lilly with heal bell, hydro pump, heart swap,and surf

Hey bro,good to have you back after a long period of chappie, written and many many thanks for using my a great pleasure for me to see him in your story and i hope you will use him throughout whole one thing bro,its a un-equal and Girantina the most two powerful pokemon are used against not fair(lol).I bet that Ash will win without losing any sweat(lol).Anyway,nicely written and I enjoyed it very ,first you should write the whole story and rewrite re-writing a chapter is lenghty process and I cant wait to read your next bro,Update as soon as then...

CiaO!

OH MY GOD! GIRATINA AND MEWTWO? I JUST CAN'T BELIEVE IT!NICE PREVIEW!

Ash should get eventually a powerful team and Larvitar is a good start. Will one of the girls he traveled with will become his 'Queen'?

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Infinitely better then the previous version. In fact the last version I had only been reading because it was different then most others. Now it's a great read and different.

If your planning on including Lapras in the team again, I must say, thank you. Lapras is my second favorite pokemon, right behind Cloyster.

As for Larvitar, it's a good inclusion as well, though I must ask that if you have Mewtwo join the team like in the previous version, that he be the only Legendary, it's just seems so... unrealistic if he starts capturing legendary's like they were child's play, though, if you go by the games, they are.

Ah well, can't wait for the next update, hope it's soon.

Later.

Awesome chapter and what a battle scene!I really amazed how pikachu beat who is the cheery Ash?I think there are Two Ash.1 is the King and other is who is the third?Update ASAP

good chapter and really a nice its make a little bit confusion which is King Ash and which is real great work by soon.

I'll send m OC to you by that you will use it.

Hey dude,nice chapter.I really enjoyed one thing confused should put Dark Ash's sentence in Bold its really hard to understand.

Anyway,its a nice chapter after a long period of work by ,many many thanks to you for using my OC.I hope you will use him throughout the whole story and give him a good ,you should update quick this I am really waiting for your next ,until then...

CiaO!

Good writting and really nice story.

Nice chapter.I loved the way how you wrote this job and Update soon.

What? I don't get it. What was Ash so angry about?