tifa saying to cloud I love you

Tifa to chocobo head idiot dammit cloud open your eyes and see what is in front of you wa woman who has been in love with you since before you left nibelheim for midgar i was the one who made that promise with i was the one who wrote you letters i was the one who sat by the nibelheim gates waiting for you I was the one who carried you back to nibelheim when you had injured your rib cage during that monster attack I was the one who found you at the midgar train station and i was the one who stayed by your side when you was sick by mako poison not aeris i love you

tifa to my chocobo head idiot don t you get it I love yoi I loved you since before you left our hometown to join soldier

Way to flanderize the characters. Cloud didn't recognize either girls' feelings at first, but by the time they're living together it's pretty obvious, so I don't know why you make him THAT thickheaded. Or for that matter how he can turn around and go Casanova 3 seconds after realizing it when he's always been awkward at flirting.

I'd suggest getting rid of the bold and underlining and what not and just go with the regular quotation marks for speaking 'cause it gets a little needlessly confusing, but keeping the italics is understandable for a dream. Besides that, the pace was quite fast and it was very OOC; it doesn't seem to fit well with the first installment "Thank You, Cloud" which was sweet (even though I didn't know why she randomly climbed into bed with him).

UWE HE HE, TERRIFIC, NEEDS A BIT OF TUNING UP BUT IT'S A NICE CHAPTER, YAHAHAHAHAHAHA