oww ive been hoping someone would pull up such ridiculous and ill-timed act while facing death -im talking bout that proposal! hahahahh that caught me off-guard and awe shock then reminisce myself on how if youd included the shocking reaction of melissa and kurz! bulls-eye! oh yeah
like how you made her as sub to the otaku, claiming her to rescue the damsel instead and how you describe their fights way to go!

Another awesome FMP story.. THX!

Aww..thank you..it was really good.. i love your writing?

I can't wait to read more...especially about this series ,

Somehow im reminded of Star Wars by this story. Sousuke's anger and turning his back on everyone he knew are in lines with the downfall of Anakin Skywalker to the dark side after believing his wife and children died, and turned from a kind man into the murderous tyrant Darth Vader.

A very good story you have made!

wholly crap that was so well written and GREAT lemon and story keep it up!

very good thanyou

I must admit it, this fiction is impressive. The thing which was best was the plot, taking it from when Sousuke think Kaname is death was wonderful.

There was a good characters development too, I like the "hairs" idea. Lot of other things to applaude but I prefer to avoid spoiling because some people (like me) read review before starting a story.

Only couple of things bothered me :

-What about Kaname Dad ? Doesn't he have saying about it. After all Kaname didn't go to school for over half a year but we didn't heard at all about him. Curious...

-Also the training with Kaname, at that point I felt the story was rushed, Seven months passed in a blur. Would have loved the fic longer probably... well it prove it's a good story

Surely the best FanFiction I've read so far on FMP (and I did read already a lot of them).

a lovely and well written story, well done :D

This was so wonderfully written. Thank you for the great story.

I loved every bit of it!

JEZ! lol this was so freaking cute! I love your writing style, especially for this series! I can't wait to read more of your work!

A worthy end to a great story. The song sells it, what can I say.

My only other comment had to do with the previous chapter. It worked, you certainly can't argue with that, but that had to be about the cruelest thing Kaname could have done to Tessa. Its good to see that didn't cause lasting harm.

Otherwise, I hope you keep writing in this fandom. Its been a little slow lately, and good fiction is always welcome in any case.

wow. i'm mind blown on how amazing that fanfic was. no joke. incredibly well written, engaging and well thought out story. it's hard to find good fanfics, but yours was definitely something i haven't seen in a while. you should be really proud of yourself with how well it was done, because i'm still awed with how absolutely amazing that story was. high fives.

they survive all obstacles, pain and hurt... all their effort gav new results. results they will always cherish. sosuke's soul is kaname

this last chapter was so cool... it was so cute and adorable. they really beat the odds here. the last scene was to die for knowing they are starting their own family, sosuke's own family.

Very deep, that King and the Pawn comment. I assume the box you meant was a coffin. It really made me think. A nice ending to Leonard also...I guess Sousuke made him think too. Well, until he blew his brains out anyway. Then he probably stopped thinking...but he might not have stopped talking. LOL...nice job. I retreat from my inane ramblings yet again.