Seriously this could have been so much better if u didn't add any pairings, literally there 12, y do they need to be in a relationship? and female haku? u should have just left the pairings for imagination or put a actual women with him

update now or I'll get you in your sleep

Idea for a monster: a metallic black skeletal giant with four arms and a reptilian tail, writhed in poisonous purple/red flames and smokey grey skull-spirits.

So Naruto is basically As Nodtt using The Fear from Bleach.

Though the story had a good plot there were somethings I didn't like, namely how naruto took so long to beat sasuke when his body was modified by kurama and how he trained since he was four and yet can't do water walking. Minus that the story was good you should update more

Oh my...
this is boring as fuck.

I personally don't see why you would mention Friday the 13th or any of those other movies to the story. There is technology mentioned in said movies that don't exist in the Naruto verse. But I understand it is fanfiction which is why I won't let my OCD rage out of control. But to somewhat satisfy it I recommend you disclaim ownership of things like that to avoid potential lawsuits. The story is great and the bloodline was balanced for the most part. But I'm a bit curious as to how the inner mechanics of it work. It could make for a really interesting filler chapter later on if you do those. Guess I'm just curious because behind every bloodline there has been some kind of science behind it. With elemental bloodlines there was always a ratio of two or more elements mixed to get the wanted element. You could actually take the bloodline a step further.

Shadow clones are theorized to be composed of a yang chakra she'll containing regular chakra. So perhaps instead of just yang chakra copied from the user of the technique it requires a ratio of him chakra for more 'life'?

Naruto is to fucking weak and this bloodline sucks ass why didn't Naruto tell hiruzen what sasuke said about konahamaru and only caring about power why explain his bloodline to any of them in the first place t wasn't kakashis place to do that n the first place it wasn't his call the basterd

why the fuck is Naruto so weak that it took that much effort to beat sasuke if the fox pretty much made narutos body a perfect killing machine and him training all the time now cause he cant sleep anymore and what not I think you severely weakened him

It will make him exude bloodlust to those who want to injure him.

awesome chap

this is awesome

Besides being a bit boring you contradicted the very reason that the 9 tails gave the bloodline to begin with. The bijuu wanted to give the kit powers to make him stronger and then told the kid to get stronger to stop being so pathetic. Right after that you gave the kit insomnia and a severe case of Nara-ism. So basically now you have someone who is weaker than he was, too lazy to train, too tired to care and wants absolutely nothing to do with his bloodline unless he has to use it or is asked to use it. Plus you gave him decent skills with a staff but with almost no ninjutsu, genjutsu or taijutsu to work with. With that skill set as soon as the kit looses his staff hes pretty much a pathetic lump of worthless crap unless he actually uses his bloodline. A ninja must always work all skills to prepare for the unexpected. Honestly this kit sounds more like Ino than anyone else and is vastly inferior to even kiba or sauske even though he beat him with a staff during the exams. If you want to work a bloodline into the story you must not break the reason for getting the bloodline in the first place. Outside of those points your work is well written with a very new story line that could have been a great change from the series. Unfortunately you failed to achieve its potential and it hasnt been worked on since '10. That in itself is a massive failure.

please make more of this story I love it its super good and I cant wait for the next one.I want to know something;what would happen if Naruto got knocked out? Would he have nightmares or not?

I'm just waiting for his mom to get brutally killed.