VERY good! It's hard to do a story like this.

Excellent writing style.

Wow...that was so incredibly bizarre but insightful at the same time. Yugi and Ryou would look at things differently...

The way you wrote this just makes it even better. It was flowing and eerie at the same time. Very well written; good job!

Wooww.. *eyes gone all shiny* That was.. amazing! So poetic.. so, so... *is speechless*

Good luck! *hugs*

-Nemi

It is interesting. Good luck in the contest.

Very nice. You captured exactly how they would be. I loved it.

I adore this story. No srsly. It was terribly well-written, each word seemed very deliberate and well-chosen. The way you framed the story out with the different versions of each passage were poetic and beautifully done, even though I'm still trying to wade through the prose to figure out what actually happened. But that isn't through any fault of yours. I just absolutely loved reading this, and how it made me think. Great job!

Wow, very interesting XD You captured their characters perfectly. Good luck in the contest

Wow. That was really interesting. I just couldn't quit reading it! It was insightful and very different than all of the others. It was really just brilliant. One of my faves for sure! Good job and good luck.

That was very different. Very.. I haven't read anything like it, actually. It was very strong :D Really good.

Good luck - Detonate

That was powerful. Very powerful. I'm not usually one to go for Heartshipping, but it made perfect sense here. I love how Yugi and Ryou are two polar opposites and thus, the finale affects them in opposite ways. And how those opposites draw them together.

Well done. Extremely well written, and a really neat idea. Best of luck in the contest :)