Is this based on your time as a high-school or college student because if so. Oh my god is this freaking relatable LMAO

Lamhet. *smirks*. Dare I assume this particular novel is actually a play concerning a man grieving for his father, debating the age-old, existential question "to be, or not to be?"...and also the death of like all the characters? Kinda like Hamlet? Ha. Very clever. I was way more amused than necessary, and it definitely made me laugh.

Also, I really loved your story. You did a great job with it and Obi-Wan and his strive for perfection.

Cheers!

HS1

That was so cute. Thanks for the great story!

This is ADORABLE! I love it! Thank you so much for writing such a lovely fic! :)

Oh Obi-wan!

Wow. Just, wow. This fic is incredibly well-written, displaying Qui-Gon's perceptiveness and Obi-wan's determination and eagerness to please perfectly. The angst is tangible here. I wonder if Obi-wan is going to work himself so hard that he simply passes out or ends up in the med-wing?

Aww!

Oh lovely story! Beautifully written. You captured Obi and Qui's characters perfectly and I love it!

As a college student with finals fast approaching, I can totally connect with Obi-wan here. He just has much better study habits than me.

This honestly is what it's like to switch from High School to College, if you're not careful and are something of a perfectionist. I wasn't careful and I "broke down" and was almost hospitalized for severe exhaustion. I somehow managed to lie to some professors (and be truthful with others) in an effort to allow me some time to rest. Luckily, I did just that, and it helped immensely. Then Christmas break came, and I got a few weeks to fully rest before going back. I can actually really empathize with Obi-Wan in this story. Good work.

BEST FIC EVER. I LOVE THIS.

Oh dear. Stubborn Obi-Wan. I don't know which is worse - an inattentive Master or a Padawan who won't talk. Obi-Wan's being ridiculous and disrespectful by lying. I'd have cracked under the second or third query of something being amiss. I hope this gets resolved soon.

wow. that was an amazing story. i loved seeing obi-wan's emotions throughout the story.

Awesome job!

Wow. That was truly accurate. *sigh* I'll probably be doing almost the exact same thing soon. Very soon. lol. Not really looking forward to that.

Anyways, great story, very realistic (mostly). I can sympathize with Obi. *cries*

:-)

-Charis

I LOVE Qui-gon! He's so awesome! Great job on this story! :)

Adorable story. I loved it! It was a little cheesy at times, but as one who often succumbs to writing cheesy stuff, I understand and can overlook it. I feel so sorry for poor Obi but I'm happy he gets to go on a vacation. :)

You actually did pretty well on the grammar front. I spotted several mistakes but not any serious ones. Just remember that every sentence has to be ended with a period, exclamation point, or question mark. That was the biggest problem I saw.

Other than that, great job! Obi and Qui-Gon's relationship is refreshingly close. The whole thing gives me warm fuzzies, even at the worst parts, because I knew that Qui-Gon would eventually figure it out and do something about it. . Super cute!