This is really sweet and exactly how I imagined it! Great job keep writing!

A really nice moment between Bella and Jasper. I'm very impressed that this is your first fanfic, well done. Thank you for sharing x

I love this sort of stories, and I love yours loads

awesome fic! loved it! hope you write more!

I love cute and fuzzy Jasper. Great job on this. :)

Aw. This is too da-gum sweet! Excellent bonding time. Loved the ending. Keep up the good work!

Eminnis and Alicia

sweet

jasperxbella friendship

I liked this one it was well writen

Hey! I just wanted to thank you for reading my story. And I like your story. I like the concept and I like how you write. Keep it up. ]]

Aw, that was wonderful! I loved Bella and Jaspers talk and I hope you will continue writing. You are very talented.

Hm. Not bad for your first fanfic. :)

But there are a few things you can improve on...

The main thing I noticed was that your dialogue was a bit stiff and unnatural. For example...“Yeah, I am fine. I just woke up that is all." This would sound better if it was, "Yeah, I'm fine. I just woke up, that's it." To check your dialogue, you might wanna read it aloud to make sure it sounds right. That always helps me. There was some syntax (sentence structure) that sounded sort of natural to me, too.

My last thing is marking the change in POVs...I know it's really common in the Twilight section, but it's one of my fanfiction pet peeves. I personally think it's kind of offensive to the reader to tell them who is speaking. 99% of the time, I can tell who is speaking without the POV being directly stated. And POVs probably shouldn't be changed so quickly, anyways, though you only quickly switched POVs once (the one Jasper sentence at the end).

Alright, good job. Keep on writing! :D

-Whispy.

Nice story!

could y;ou possibly continue this see I love when Jasper and Bella talk because they know so little about each other