Excellent fic... so in-character. I love how you portray their dance of will they/won't they in the beginning of the series. Thank you

Nice.

Thanks for the very good read

So very Lisbon. So very Jane.

great work :-D

Oh, I love your writing. Their exchange is so subtle and delicate. Well done.

I think this line was perfect: He doesn't want her pity, and he mustn't have her love.

Question: where can I find 'behind the wheel' and 'blood

and whisky' fics that are mentioned in this

fics summary? Id

love to read them. Second, this

fic is so writing flows

naturally and the light tone is refreshing.

I am yet again, impressed by your writing! One of the most insightful pieces in the Mentalist Fanfiction Archives. Seriously good.

From the very start, they were SO Jane and Lisbon. Their banter was full of funny moments. And it made it even more interesting when it was accompanied by their thoughts. The dynamics of their relationship never cease to amaze me!

The nighmare and Lisbon's reaction were perfect. The most impressive thing about it was it was not over-done as most tend to do! I loved that!

"What? It's too early to have you being handsome at me. It's indecent." LOL! xD! I love Lisbon! The morning conversation was interesting and it was SO Jane and Lisbon to avoid discussing the events of the night.

"I can't take you seriously when you have butter on your chin." LOL!

One on the lines that stuck with me was "He doesn't want her pity, and he mustn't have her love." Really good writing there.

And the last bit when they get a new case reminded me of this week's episode when she switches into the real world with a snap. That's Lisbon!

"...Forever caught in this endless bloody dance of desire and denial." That was my favorite line of this story. That was the entire Jane-Lisbon relationship in a single line! IMPRESSIVE!

Great insights! Great stories! Again, I hope against hope that you'll write a Mentalist story again!

"He's committing sexual harassment just sitting there." lol

Also, the Mr. Lisbon thing was great. Oh, Jane, just can't let himself be happy, can he?

Love this one — the screaming UST and all the little character moments. It’s very well done. Some of my favorite parts:

“Late in the evening, a small town at the corner of no and where, and a pretty gingerbread confection of a guest-house.”

Good opener, and a creative description

“He does look a bit crumpled. It has been a long day for both of them. They are both adults. Maybe he'll behave like a rational...

No, he won't. Damn.

But. It's late. She's tired. She has a gun.”

Too funny. And very Lisbon – especially the gun part :).

“‘And you must be Mr Lisbon?’

Lisbon looks like she's going to stroke out right there and then.

Jane signs the card with a flourish and his most charming grin, scoops up the key and heads up the stairs.

She pulls back the flailing remnants of her sanity, and starts after him.

‘Jane...’

‘This is a conservative small town, my dear. No sense in upsetting anybody.’ He plays his trump card. ‘She saw my ring. And I didn't feel like explaining.’

‘Oh.’ Guilty blush. ‘Of course not.’

‘Well, she would just think you were my mistress.’

He always manages to do this to her. When he'd kissed that...Dr Miller, and she'd teased him, he'd looked so solemn and hurt, that she'd tried to be nice to him. And he'd played her. Made her feel in the wrong – then given her that sweet and sunny smile. Yes, that one.

Bastard.”

This little exchange fits well with their characters — Lisbon’s guilt, and then Jane making her regret feeling bad for him.

“Oh god. Patrick Jane in pale blue pj's looks almost sweet.”

He SO would…

“‘Pillowfight?’ says a voice in her ear. She nearly falls out of her bed.”

Jane would definitely do this – he loves making people uncomfortable…

“Patrick Jane cannot have those things. He does not deserve a house and a family and anything good. He destroys the people who love him, those people that he loves.”

Very, very in-character

“He jolts up from a world of nightmare into darkness.

‘Jane! Jane...Patrick. It's just a dream. Let it go.’

He's embarrassed. She's matter-of-fact, though her words are at odds with the gentle hand that soothes him back to the pillows.

Hammer of his heart under her fingertips, and she can see the wide dark pools of his eyes. She reaches to turn on the light, and he catches her wrist.

‘No...I'm fine now. Thank you.’ He doesn't sound fine, but he is definitely awake.”

Great, vividly described scene. His embarrassment at her having seen his weakness and frailty is right on.

“She has an adorable little snort when she wakes up. He files that away for future reference.”

LOL!

“He's looking impossibly cheerful for this time in the morning, washed and shaved and gleaming, all crisp white shirt and artful curls.”

Excellent description; he MUST be sparkling perfection!

“He's a little too tidy and perfect this morning, she realizes. As the caffeine fires her neurons, she understands – he needs to regain the upper hand after last night.”

Nice character observation. Yes, he has to be back in control after what happened…

“He needs the pain, a goad to his spirit, punishment for his failings, his conceit.”

Sadly, this seems to be true.

"'I can't take you seriously when you have butter on your chin.’"

Perfect line!

“Soft delicate curve of her lower lip beneath his touch, startled fawn eyes.”

Another good description that really captures how flustered and off-balance Lisbon is when Jane is flirtatious with her.

All in all, a great story, and one of my favorites. I hope you start writing Mentalist stories again. You are missed!

Lovely complication.

I love this cliche, but prefer to see it done well, as you do here, using the inevitable exchange of intimacies to make them both remind themselves of why they can't have more (but can't help aching for it).

You can see the sexual tension building between both Jane and Lisbon here but neither of them willing to break it. I can understand why Jane is so reluctant to get involved with anyone after what happened to his family. That point was very well written.

I enjoyed Jane giving Lisbon breakfast in bed and her reaction to it was priceless.

Excellent job.

simply beautiful:) i loved the butter on her chin comment and that he had to overcompensate with his usual armor. wonderful stuff :) keep writing because you have me completely addicted :)

Yana