This is so good! Thank you!

So well written and insightful. The repeated pattern is a brilliant way to drive home the emotion of the story.

Wow. I loved this! It's poetic and wistful and very much awesome. Thumbs up for a brilliant little piece. I just wish it were longer.

Too beautiful.

i love your interpretation of sirius!

That's drop dead sad! I wish I could write that beautiful

Aaah I love this. Very insightful. Sirius and Regulus are my favorites.

Sirius needs to see... just open his eyes and SEE.

Painful and lovely. Props for giving Peter full inclusion and credit. This really just made me ache, in a good way, and it all seems so plausible. A great fleshing out of Sirius' character.

oh beautiful. Just beautiful.
So touching. I love how perceptive the Marauders are, how they take care of their own silently - because they're boys and they can't talk about fEELINGS, but they'll make sure each other is fine anyways.
I liked Remus' the most.
Absolutely lovely.

Extremely well written, fantastic job! :)

This was really well written, loved it!

This was beautiful... thats all the words i can manage right now...

This was beautiful. Thanks for a good read!

OK, it takes a lot for me to cry, but this ... this was simply beautiful.

I have read many fan fictions about Sirius Black and I believe he is one of the most fascinating, and mysterious characters in Harry Potter.

Some of the worthwhile fan fictions (out of hundreds) are - "Whisper", "As You Once did for Me", "Did I Ever tell You?", "Alone", "Unforgivable", "Wavering Melody", "The Tree in the Forest", "A Feast in Azkaban" and, of course, yours.

The way you have illuminated the ignorance regarding him is praiseworthy.

Grammar/Punctuation:

There were no grammatical errors. The language is immaculate, except perhaps for a little too many commas in the longer sentences.

Tone/Mood:

There is the evident desire to know, and on Sirius' part, forget. The story is continuous even with the constant and sudden breaks. The feeling of failing, yet fighting until and beyond the end ... perfect.

Flow/Rhythm:

A subtle blend of poignant elegance, eloquent in both form and meaning. Simplistic and poetic. I could feel all, the emotion was greater than the visuals.

Overall Impression:

Tear - jerker. Inspiring. Rhythmic. Magical. Impactful. Unforgettable.

IMPORTANT - IF YOU DON'T MIND, CAN I USE THIS STORY IN A FANFICTION? I'M WRITING A FANFICTION I WHICH THE MARAUDERS READ SNIPPETS OF EACH OTHER'S LIVES.