hi! i hope yuh welcome critizisim .. :) dont be offended: first things first.. i love your storylinee, its very interesting. I've only come across one storyline simmilar to this. 2nd thing is i think yuh have great ideas but yuh cn always improve.. by this i mean try and make the story sound more real show more of nessie feelings dont rush it ... i mean if yuh were to find out you are half vampire and half human yuh wouldnt have a 5min shock and aceppt yuh would be confuesd and anry right? ..seeing a big wolf yuh would have screamed and yuh know its not a everyday thing is it for a man to suddnley say 'oh come we me to your real parents' i would have questioned ..ran away even for a hour or soo just to think...put yourself in nessie situation. other than that yuh really have great ideas! please dont be offended ... much reading love

lex(lol my name is alexa too) hehe x

Update soon! This story is freaking awesome!

Great story! I love it! Update soon! PLZ?

Please write more! I love this story and Jacob! W00t go Team Jacob!

this is really good please write more soon ]

Nice!

nice, I really like it, update soon!

Hi

i just read your fic and i really like it please write more soon cause i need to find out what happens next ]

I wna no wht happens next!

good story btw!

I liek your story a lot!

Very originel! Update soon please.

Sounds like a fun story, but a few questions though. If she did not like human food, how come she's not starving? and how come she does not remember that she ate/drank blood? oh, and one more. How come she does not remember more about Bella and the rest of the Cullens? I'll put it on my story alert, it sounds fun. :) Update soon ;)

um your not allowed to do Authors

Notes its against the rule you couldve done that at the beginning or end of a chapter