Loved it awesome

MAKE CHAPTER 2 TODAY PLEASE I'M IN SUSPENCE RIGHT NOW HERE!

I stop reading half way though...if you going to have a tragedy then have more build up to it.

You shoud of wrote about cheese dying

When shadow said "I want my money" I immediately thought of the Family Guy episode

OMG!SO...I don'y even have the words...great story!just...kinda sad(

This was alright, but I still need to know who this all started, because you just went there, without any flashback (sorry for saying that in the wrong way if it offended you) There seem to be no piont to this story (sorry) Maybe if you do the sequel, maybe I can know more on it. Any, a good start and I hope the sequel to be better. (sorry again for the words I say, even though you said not to be harsh).

...shadow is not THAT messed up.i would give you a better idea. but then i would need a new one.

Wait. Tails thought Shadow was dead. Maybe he was wrong about Cream too. After all, somebody has to go after him and try to calm him down.

Poor Tails.

Aw, how sad :(

Cream died ;.;

This was a good story.

My entry should be up soon...maybe.