"good guys, bad guys, and jinx"
I SEE WHAT YOU DID THERE!

God, this was gorgeous. Well done, thanks so much for sharing.

Goodness! This is f**king beautiful!
I loved reading every bit of this.
It was so real, and dark.
Just wow. Perfect really.
And when you ended it with Phil Collins, you made my day.
I adore him.
Great Job!

This was great! Please write the next chapter soon!

wow good:)

I loved Batman Beyond, I really did, but it's the little unsaid things like this that really get me, and make me wish that it was never a part of the DCAU. I can't stand the thought of...this. Of everyone being cold and sad and Diana being upset and Bruce breaking, and...you know what I mean.

Your writing, as usual, is great, Wally's voice shines through, and overall it does a very good job of depressing me.

ooooooh! That was dark and depressing and AWESOME! great work!

I loved the references to his degree in forensics and the Jinx thing. Wally's thoughts are so nice to hear.

Heartbreaking.

Wally's views, particularly the last few lines, were insightful and showed why he was the conscience of the group. It tied in nicely with Teen Titans, I never ha any problem seeing the two shows as being in the same continuity and you capitalized on the effects that would have on Flash's views.

You've got a simplistically powerful piece here, the song lyrics at the end were a shot to the heart of a wake up call after reading. Props to knowing it's Phil Collins and not Disturbed.

This story is really good. It has a lot of feeling and you can get into it easily. It's believable and I really enjoyed it. :D

Again, you blow me away. One thing I want to pick at super quick - the last sentence says "bother's" when it should be "bothers" - but moving on! The choice of Wally to relate this story is what makes it different (in an awesome way) from other "Poor Tim!" tales. It's chilling. And I'm not really sure how you did it, but you have this kind of tension in your words that I can feel - everything's slow and heavy for the fastest man alive - meaning that it's business as usual, but still. I mean I know that you spelled that out in your story, but it's evident in your choice of words and punctuation as well. I'm glad I read this!

Great story! :)

Very well written .