This ripped at my heart but in the best way. Had to give it a re-read it was so good. Nice job :)

I liked this story. Probably because I kept thinking their roles were reversed; that Hanabi had done the hating and Kiba had done the dying. In their endings though, it wouldn't matter who would hate and who would love would it?

-WhereDidMyPenNameGo

That's one thing I love about kibahana, they can have that total love hate thing goin on there.

I could go along with the Hinata not being like a sister to him, but him hating her? Then again he did hide it so I guess it works.

I REALLY liked this! Even though it was depressing, it wasn't "smack in the face" depressing which is really hard to do! Great one-shot!

Sand-Jounin-Temari

Ahh so beautiful!

It was wonderful! Loved the ending.

I'm writing a story with an original character whose on a team with the young Hyuuga. I plan to pair her up with Kiba later. Although i think I'll try to make Hanabi a little nicer (not much though) you've givin me some inspiration as to how I'll spark the flame. Don't worry you won't have any copy write issues, really. Your great and I can't wait to read your other stories!

Thanks!

Peace!

Amazing. I love it.

I liked this quite a bit. The ending was well-written.

Definitely an interesting read. You used some fairly unusual concepts - the KibaxHanabi pairing, the whole "hinata evil" thing - that gave the overall written piece an angsty-bitter feel.

Constructive Criticsm - nothing major, but :

Personally, I felt that some more depth of Kiba and Hanabi's relationship could have been included.

[ This story is ] A glinting diamond in the rough. Good job, and I look forward to your future writing. ( If possible, could I request some more KibaxHanabi ... ? )

Oh wow, this was depressing.

You, my friend, have a knack for angst.

And is this, if I may be so bold to ask, in any way related to the song "There's a Fine, Fine Line" from the musical Avenue Q?

Even though it has nothing to do with the song itself.

I'm just being ignorant like that and related titles.

I'm sorry, I take it back, haha.

Oh! Could I request a ShikaTema?

I know you saw that coming. ;)

Keep up the good work.

PS: I still can't beleive you're JUST starting out writing, you and Aniki are incredible. :)

It's well written and I really liked reading it.