Considering its your first time, I like it. The crying however is a little too sudden though, and the feelings, even if soul mates, are a little rushed. I hope you update soon though, and if you need someone to bounce off ideas of, I'm your person :)

this is a rearly good 1st chapter please make another !

It was cute but way too fast. The pace went immediately from one thing to another. If you spaced out like made it a day or two long it would have been better. Buy still pretty good for a first attempt at it xD

heya! really cool ;)

what type of song would she sing?

Okay... Umm... I've read a lot worse oc fics here, so for your first it's really awesome!

She's a little bit mary sue, though, I really don't see Ace as being the kind of guy to fall first sight, or first hearing lol

I know it was just romance but I've always though that a fic with Ace should be something funny, light and easy. This fic does fit those but maybe it was just a little to sweetie pie for me haha _

Keep on going, the more you write, the better will be your fics XD

Not too Shabby! I like the story so far! And i like ari too! _ Keep up the good work and keep on imagining!

SO! CUTE! I loved it!

I know this is late, but i read it and i like it.

well you don't have to improve much i like the story it just needs a little bit more detail in some parts. remember detail is not always a bad thing. you want your readers to be able imagine it in there mind with whats going on and where there at. but other then that its really good.

awsome! my friend ive writes a bunch of stories about an OC who has the ability of ice too.

I like your story so far...Aria reminds me of Robin and Ace put together almost...

but please update soon! :D

it was soso

Honestly... I really liked it! I can't wait for you to update and soon please!