Could use some more action, I like it, the ending was funny.

this story could benifit a lot from some action descriptions. and why does cuddy ask him to be a sperm donor then tell him she's pregnant? that doesn't make sense.

also, i understand that you want your readers to get your inflections of the dialogue, but any one who reads with inflection doesn't need you to put asterisks around the stressed words, and any one who doesn't won't get what the asterisks are for.

Cute!