The writing here is okay, but the plot is directionless. By the end of chapter 3 I had the impression that the writer had no idea where they were going with the story, so it came as no surprise to me that the ending explains absolutely nothing of what goes on. It's basically a series of disconnected time travel vignettes loosely tied together by Haruhi attacking Kyon for no reason during a crisis which is resolved off-page with no explanation.

The one I found most promising was where Kyon discovers he is married to Haruhi in the future. It could have been interesting to see how he deals with this upon returning to the present, but like all the assorted plot threads in this fic, it is dropped almost as soon as it is introduced.

The SOS Brigade deciding Kyon should kiss Haruhi was unnecessary and doesn't make sense. The alleged "similarity" between the situation and the events of episode 6 is not apparent, and there's no apparent reason why Kyon kissing Haruhi might solve the problem in any case.

I don't understand why people feel the need to come up with convoluted and contradictory explanations for Mikuru saying she can't be romantically involved with Kyon to replace the simple and logical explanation that Mikuru herself gives. The obvious problem with this particular one is that it is incompatible with Mikuru's repeated flirting with Kyon through the series (a non-issue for the canon explanation).

I had high hopes for this one since the writing is mostly in-character and suspenseful, but without a coherent story to stand on it all falls apart. Maybe the sequel is better...

he really doesn't seem to have much of a choice in any of that stuff but at the same time i still think he'd choose haruhi regardless.

I really enjoyed reading this ! I didnt really review all of the chappies 'cause... they're kind of short-.-;.

but I absoulutly love this story :D. BUT THE CLIFFIE KILLED ME GAH !

so kudos all around !

Gyahahaha...that was epic. I now hand you the trophy for "Greatest Realistic Haruhi Fanfic."

Great story. Please consider updating this again in the near future.

FINALLY! Do you know how long I've been searching for a decent time-travel story? *hugs tightly* THANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOU!

PLEASE make a sequel! pleasepleaseplease! *begs cutely*

I loved this fanfic, the characters didn't seem too OOC and the overall story was good too.

Make the damn sequel!

OMG how cool is this! Please update! My people are begging you!

This was... surprisingly awesome. Well done. :) (The Asahina gag was great, and Kyon's erratic time-travelling is also... insanely funny.)

Just to let you know, I really enjoyed this...also, how old is future Asahina? When I first read this through, I assumed she would be maybe 10-12 years old...please clarify.

Hey, I liked that.

You did a great job with Kyon's style, but there were a few typos.

But I loved reading this story, you really should write a sequel.

Sg

yeh yeah very nice fic. The plot was very nice and all those ideas were cool (h) A very good fic. Thanks for this ).

Ahaha, you captured Kyon perfectly! You didn't do too badly with the other characters, either. Weird line breaks, though...

-nohaydeque-

P.S. Favorite'd!

Kyon... G-Great-Granddad... Mikuru! o_O for once i'm speechless.

I liked the humor in chapter five, and it seemed like a perfect explanation for why Kyon wasn't supposed to like Mikuru. The whole story was incredibly interesting, and it would be wise to make a sequel.